E-commerce headline/intro critique?
My name is Drew and was wondering what you think about what I wrote for the short headline "Are your prepared..." and the following paragraph "The big one is coming..." for my site ProtectOneself.com.
It is hard for me because I sell close to 100 products both in the preparedness and protection field, two different niches.
I'm wondering if what I have written does anything for you.
My objective, with what I have written, is to instill fear and make you think that you need to buy my products or else, sort of speak.
Does it make you want to explore my site and think that maybe it is time to protect and prepare yourself and family?
Or better yet, do I even need the headline/paragraph because it is an e-commerce site compared to a one page/product sales page?
I ask that question because I know I can target my advertising i.e place an ad for a survival kit or a personal alarm or something else and direct it to that product page instead of a generic ad directed to my home page.
I do not know, but really do appreciate your opinion on what you think.
Thank you for your time, It is really appreciated!
Drew
If you can drive Biz Op Phone Calls .... I'm Buying