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Hi Dr Dan,

Very impressive!

I love the videos... you come across as being genuine.

The testimonials on the sales page are awesome.


My 2 cents worth.

John

The videos seem like you want to make my life "better" - but that's a relative term. I think you're on to something, it just needs some fine-tuning.

Right now, I'm not sure who exactly your customer is. You're covering all the bases, from wealth to relationships, etc...but IMHO if you're making your customer guess why they're reading your sales letter (i.e. pick which reason applies to you), they'll go elsewhere.

What exactly would be MY rockstar life (without going through all the pain of personal change, development, and growth)? Help me define that in your letter and you'll have a winner.

Good look and feel

good I like it

Very impressive, dude! Nice videos

Very impressive. This should do well.

I signed up for your email list a few days ago because I was
intrigued by some interests we share.

To me, you have a credibility problem. You're kind of pale,
which if it's a choice is fine, but I'd expect you to have a bit
of a tan if you've got your toes in the sand making bank.
Lighting issue maybe. Try using a blue gel on your lights
or something. Maybe a different color short would flatter
your color better.

You also imply that that you've studied yogic systems
"millions of years old" (or something like that) - which
to somebody who knows the history of yoga is a warning
sign that you don't know what you're talking about.

Admittedly, people who already know this stuff are not your
target market. Still, human beings haven't even been
speaking to each other for more than a few hundred
thousand years. The notion that there is some spiritual
tradition older than about 5000 is fatuous to people who
know anything about anthropology, which is quite a lot
of people due to things like high school history and
the Learning Channel.

Anyway, I think it's a fun notion for an info product. You
just need to target it at people who are more likely to
be turned-on by your broad act rather than turned-off.

I didn't read a lot of the copy. The video was fun but I
didn't take it very seriously.

I like your site!

Two things I noticed. When I started to leave the site, the popup appeared behind the video and I couldn't tell what it was.

Second, In the video, at times you are shaking your head, even when you're giving your best benefits. that body language means no (or I am not telling the truth), you should be nodding if you want your viewers to agree with you.

Keep it up, you're on the way to a great site!!

Well, if you want to hinge your sales message even partially
on a dubious thesis, that's fine. I wouldn't.

If I were in your shoes I'd keep my claims of spiritual wisdom
and mysterious knowledge of Pleistocene civilization modest
and emphasize making money and winning love, which are
practical goals many people share that don't eliminate
the large group of people who regard recorded history as
starting about 8000 years ago - who will think you're
weird and won't buy your program.

In persuasion, if you want somebody to embrace a far-out
message, you don't start with the far-out part. You get them
to agree with simple, obvious things in the concensus reality
most (Westerners) agree on. From there you ask for
further concessions that "yes, that might be possible" -
agreements are built one upon another until the prospect
says "yes" to an idea that, initially, he regards as preposterous.

I'm not questioning your belief system about pre-verbal
higher intelligence in proto-humans. That's your belief, but
I doubt it's the belief most people share and it's an
impractical competitive angle from a marketing
point-of-view.

I'm just sayin' - ya know?

Thanks Loren and that why I am here asking all of you for advice. I really appreciate it all and am taking notes.

Peter you are the 2nd person to say the popup goes behind video? kinda strange. I will have to check into that. It is Robert Planks plugin.

Also I am going to redo the video since I originally did it at 2am after a full day of coaching private clients and doing a teleseminar. I also tried using a teleprompter for the first time and it was a mistake for me since it took alot of energy out of my video and as you said, messed my body language all up. Thanks for all the tips and I am taking notes on all of it. Thats what I love about the WF. You guys are awesome!

Here's a screen capture:

Okay, to start, I agree with Loren. The thing about million-year secrets presents a credibility issue for me. I personally believe in the possibility that humanity has been around that long but to subscribe to such a belief I almost have to believe in the stuff that Madame Blavatsky supposedly channeled over 100 years ago. Essentially, she said that humanity is presently in its 5th of seven evolutions, the last being the people of Atlantis and before that Lemuria.

But I'm getting way off topic. The point is, there will be people that take issue with the million year reference. Here's how I look at anything iffy in a presentation: I can leave it out and it won't matter or I can leave it in and it might hurt me. I think leaving it in could hurt you.

I think you come across in the videos as engaging and sincere. You hesitate a bit in each one but I don't see that as a problem as it lends to your being a 'real' person.

There is something I think will hurt you a lot in the long run and that's the picture you have in your header. Please don't take offence but you look almost like an angry rapper or something. Had this not been a critique presented on WF and I happened by your site, I would have clicked away seeing that scowl.

You're into personal development and I believe you've got to come across with smiles or at least a neutral image rather than the look of anger.

It could be that I'm just not your demographic. I was born right smack in the middle of the boomer years. Your program is the rock star secrets of life. Okay, to me rock star means hedonism and debauchery. I had that stuff mastered years ago and now I want to be on the other side of the coin.

I have no issue with rock and roll. In fact, I love it. But I don't easily relate it to personal development. Again, maybe I'm not your demographic but why narrow your field when you could have everyone seeking 'life secrets' in your camp with just a few minor adjustments to your approach?

You have the domain maketheworldyourstage.com. That has a lot broader appeal. Maybe you don't want to appeal to a broad market and are attempting to brand yourself as the rock star self-help guy... I don't know.

And finally, I like the 'jump and the net will appear' thing. I relate to it. 25 years ago when I decided to get off the 'rock star' path I ran into a teacher who touted the same concept only presented it a little differently. He said, ready, fire, aim. Again, same concept as jump...

There is a drawback to that approach though. It scares the hell out of analytical people. They don't relate to it at all. Left brain thinkers can't stand the uncertainty of such an approach. And though it appeals to me and maybe half of the population, you might be alienating a lot of folks with it. I'm sure that one of your additional seven principles might have a broader appeal. You might want to lead with that.

I realize I sound very critical with this review but I believe that's why you asked for reviews in the first place. If you've identified a younger audience you might be right on target with what you're doing. But the personal development field is huge and in my opinion you could be harvesting a lot more profit with some relatively minor adjustments aimed at the masses. Good Luck!

I am less experienced than most of the forum, but may shed a little different light on the subject. Some quick points.

Agree with both above posters on the "million years" As soon as I heard it, I stopped listening and started dwelling on it. You lost credibility right away. If you must, maybe "thousands".

I found the background a little distracting. I first thought, as a marketer, was "Why doesn't he have something written on the white board to support his message". But really, I think a better background would be less distraction, and perhaps something that doesn't look like it was filmed in a corner of your basement.

AS an extension of that, you introduce yourself as a Doctor who made $300,000 and your appearance makes you look like you just got home from a drive-by-shooting. Maybe a little harsh, but I'm supposed to take advice from you? But, I agree with travelinguy, maybe I'm not your demographic either.

Last. I liked your family shot and helped restore your credibility and "nice-guy" image, but still not necessarily your authority.

I hope this helps. Best of luck.