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Help needed with Weight Loss landing page...

by huggybear_dk
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Hi guys,

I am looking for some opinions on my landing page. Do you think this type of one pager will work?

Get Six Pack Abs


Thank you all in advance

Derek
#landing #loss #needed #page #weight
  • Profile picture of the author R.T.Bucher
    Looks great! Good here shot with real life examples. But,....

    It's missing one vital component.

    Where's the opt in?

    I would collect emails first and then send them to the Truth.
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    • Profile picture of the author huggybear_dk
      thanks for your reply Rob. I was considering offering a free ebook/report so I will add that in and then re-direct to the offer.

      Do you think the copy is too hyped?? I was thinking of spending some money on a PPC campaign for testing conversions before I go full steam ahead in driving traffic.

      Derek
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    • Profile picture of the author Alex Cohen
      Derek,

      To me, the "before" and "after" comparison is not effective. It's difficult to tell what shape your bodies were in "before".

      Alex
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      • Profile picture of the author huggybear_dk
        Thanks Alex for taking the time to have a look. I get where you are coming from. Do you think a before and after is even needed?

        I think i will takes rob's advice and offer a free ebook?
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        • Profile picture of the author zapseo
          Is the before and after needed?

          ABSOLUTELY.

          Nearly any product which promises a change in appearance needs that credibility.

          My biggest problem with the page is that you need to promote one dominant benefit. I couldn't figure out whether that was 6 pack abs or weight loss? You need to be crystal clear in what you are offering, otherwise you'll confuse prospects and... confused prospects DON'T BUY.

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          • Profile picture of the author huggybear_dk
            Thanks Judy,

            I agree with what you are saying though, but the two go hand in hand, getting six pack abs is all about weight loss. But as you say if the page is leaving prospects confused then I think I will need to be more specific.

            thanks
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  • Profile picture of the author natalie1
    Not sure if intentional, but the "after" picture's head is cut off and seems like the body may not be the same as Rick's "before" picture. As a buyer I might want to see a before and after of the same person.
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  • Profile picture of the author Loren Woirhaye
    Nice looking page.

    I think you have some "fat" hanging on the headline, piling on
    descriptive words and trying to tell about your story all at once
    - not really relevant to what YOU want - which is a click.

    here's an example of a trim headline:

    *REVEALLED* How A Lazy Gym-Hater Lost The Belly Fat And Got *Rock Hard* 6 Pack Abs!!

    or how about this sort of thing? :

    You Can Get 6 Pack Abs Even If You Hate Working Out.
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    • Profile picture of the author AnarchyAds
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      • Profile picture of the author huggybear_dk
        Malibu and Anarchy,

        Thanks for your quality posts and taking the time to critique my page. I did feel that the headline was a bit long so I will work on trimming it down like you said. I have a report i can give away so I am working on getting a version of the same page up that captures emails and then redirects to the offer.

        So in your opinion if i am offering a free report do i replace the section where I say "you are about to discover" and put the optin there?

        Thanks again to everyone that comments, i really appreciate it.

        D
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  • Profile picture of the author Eric Engel
    Those before and after pictures are so unbelievable. Really--even if they're true, I would put something that people might actually accept as true.
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  • Profile picture of the author Internet Stores
    I like the page. Your opt-in form is great with nice graphics. The free book idea is good! The page has a nice clean, tidy look. Good opt-in form.
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