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Always Looking For Your Advice

by Matthew Shields
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I've always tried to get as many opinions on my projects as possible. Of course the new one is no exception. Please have a peak and let me know your thoughts!

The Juju List

Thank You
Happy Trails
Matt
#advice
  • Profile picture of the author Ken Strong
    Your link isn't formatted correctly -- is this your page?

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    • Profile picture of the author Matthew Shields
      Hi Ken

      Opps...double http'ed there! Sorry yep that's the right one...

      Happy Trails
      Matt
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  • Profile picture of the author travlinguy
    Your copy is loaded with grammar, spelling and punctuation issues. I stopped reading after the first two sentences. Either run it through Word grammar check or get a good proofreader to go through it... Good luck.
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  • Profile picture of the author Matthew Shields
    Thanks Travelingguy

    bizpro--I'm with you I would much rather just watch a video and call it good. maybe I'll do some tests with the video only and include a link to the "story" side of things. That way the viewer can choose if he wants to continue on and read or just sign up

    Happy Trails
    Matt
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    • Profile picture of the author Buckwheat.corn
      Your sales letter must be re-written.

      The headline is weak. The formatting is horrendous. It's a total turn off.

      If you make any money with this letter, I'll be surprised. If you are serious about this business venture, hire an experienced copywriter.

      I wish I could be more specific but there are too many problems. I would end up actually writing the sales letter.

      I wish I could say better things but I have to be honest to help you.

      Plus, I would get rid of the name "Juju" list. That doen't mean anything.
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  • Profile picture of the author Matthew Shields
    Thank you for the honesty everyone....you have confirmed what I had already suspected....This is a big help!

    Happy Trails
    Matt
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  • Profile picture of the author travlinguy
    Matt, I noticed your comment about making your page exclusively (or almost exclusively) a video page. Stats show that about 55% of the population process info visually so that might work for them. The rest want something to read.

    I rarely, if ever look at a video online (except when I'm just hanging out at Youtube playing tunes) unless the copy piques my interest enough first. And if video just automatically starts on a site without me clicking for it, I exit immediately.

    One of the biggest mistakes a marketer can make is to present something solely based his or her own tastes. What I'm saying is, you'll lose a lot of potentials if you go the 'video only' route. Just something to consider. Good luck.
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    • Profile picture of the author Matthew Shields
      Originally Posted by travlinguy View Post

      Matt, I noticed your comment about making your page exclusively (or almost exclusively) a video page. Stats show that about 55% of the population process info visually so that might work for them. The rest want something to read.

      I rarely, if ever look at a video online (except when I'm just hanging out at Youtube playing tunes) unless the copy piques my interest enough first. And if video just automatically starts on a site without me clicking for it, I exit immediately.

      One of the biggest mistakes a marketer can make is to present something solely based his or her own tastes. What I'm saying is, you'll lose a lot of potentials if you go the 'video only' route. Just something to consider. Good luck.
      Hey Travelingguy

      Thank you I understand that some don't like to see video. Actually I'm fascinated by how people react to pages. I found the reactions here to this sales page especially interesting. You guys hate it but I have had "some" very favorable reviews from my target clients. I often wondered if I was losing clients because of the copy.

      I suppose it's just about finding the perfect cocktail between both tastes.
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