Help needed please!!!
In all of your wisdom, I was wondering whether you may look through the work and tell me in your honest opinion whether what I have posted is indeed 'bad copy' or it will suffice along with any possible suggestions for improvement. I have only posted the non NLP copy but if anybody is interested, I would be more than happy to discuss the whole project in more detail.
Thanking you in advance
Sam
Luxury car
Product benefits\brand values: Comfort over distances, styling
The new XYZ i-Class. Delivering exceptional comfort through great styling.
Moisturiser
Product benefits\brand values: Moisturises, ethically sourced ingredients, superior product to competition, lasts up to 12 hours.
Do you want softer skin? XYZ cream contains yellow tang extract. Sourced from a sustainable population, it gives advanced hydration for up to 12 hours.
Cereal
Product benefits\brand values: Helps weight loss, tasty, healthy
XYZ Crunch is packed full of great tasting berries meaning that there is no better way to stay healthy and loose weight.
Dog Food
Product benefits/brand values: Protein content, taste, shiny coat, health benefits
XYZ's high protein content means that your dog can enjoy a healthier life with a shinier coat.
Dishwasher Tablets
Product benefits/brand values: Leaves dishwasher shining, superior cleaning
XYZ dishwasher tablets superior cleaning power leaves your plates spotless and your dishwasher shining. Not even our nearest competitor can argue with that.
Netbook Laptop Computer
Product benefits/brand values: fast processor, clear screen, ultra portable, perfect commuter computer
With its fast processor and 11.6" HD screen, the ultra portable XYZ Netbook Pro is perfect tool for busy commuters.
Single Malt Whisky
Product benefits/brand values: great taste, heritage brand, aids relaxation
XYZ single malt whiskey has been helping you relax since 1859 and we haven't seen a need to change the recipe since. It tasted great then and it tastes great now.
Mobile Phone
Product benefits/brand values: small, stylish, packed full of features, rang of colours
The new XYZ 1020i is the small phone packed full of big features, all wrapped up in exquisite styling.
Caribbean Holiday
Product benefits/brand values: experienced operators, relaxing time, easy to book
XYZ are experts at finding the perfect Caribbean holiday for you. With highly experienced staff all willing to help with any enquiry, you couldn't possibly find a more relaxing experience anywhere else.
Garden Furniture
Product benefits/brand values: high quality teak, sustainable source, made in England, highly durable
Handmade in our Devonshire workshop, XYZ garden furniture is only made from the finest teak from sustainable sources. We are so proud of the quality, that we give you a 10 year guarantee
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