Rip this sales letter apart- don't feel sorry for the writer!
It's a first draft... I gave someone new a shot at coming up with salescopy and this is what they came up with...
It's not live yet (well... technically it is, but no PR has been given to it yet.)
take a look and give me your best (and worst) comments:
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