Another round of "Help the n00b". (Please? lol)

Regarding your sales page: who is "we?"

You have...how shall I put this...a very ambitious pricing structure. If I were you, I'd try to pep up my sales letter sample if I were looking to pull in full-on professional prices. As it stands, it seems a bit amateurish, from the formatting, to the quality, right down to the part where I open it in Open Office and immediately see the squiggly underline of "palpitations" being misspelled.

It's NOT a bad start! Don't let me get you down. But since you appear to be leaning on samples instead of testimonials by way of proof, your samples better be ready to do some heavy lifting, and I'm not sure that one's ready for prime time.

Imagine yourself as a product. How would you sell...well...you? Because you ARE the product, here. How can YOU reach out and grab your prospect in the form of a headline? How can YOU convey your benefits? What bullet points capture the essence of what you bring to the table? What story can YOU tell about YOU that will be the most captivating thing a prospect who needs a copywriter will read all day?

Are you familiar yet with the concept of a swipe file? If not, it's essentially a collection of well written sales letters you read, study, and mine for structures, style, method, and inspiration. Check out the sites of some other copywriters. See what you're up against, and how far you have to go. You could do worse than to model your presentation after a successful pro until such time as you're competent and confident enough to blow it up and start over on your own.

GL

Yep, it looks like you need to take a step back and "earn your spurs".

1. You need to start writing - period. Your style is under-developed. You may need to farm yourself out at rock-bottom rates to get some real pieces under your belt.
2. Your website needs to show off your talent. Right now it just shows that you can sign-up for a free website
3. Your pricing structure is way off. Take a look at what other experts are charging - just on this forum.

Copywriting is hard to break into but extremely rewarding once you get your feet under you. My best advice is to spend sometime studying the approaches used by copywriters on this forum and start writing!

Stan

I agree with Paul, check out clickbank and also look over the sales pages of products that are converting well, it will help you tons