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by Lucas Adamski

Posted: 14 years ago 5 replies

COPY WRITING

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#copy #rate

Lady 14 years ago

I posted a brief portion of your site here, and I have made some suggestions below.
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You will say it's a copy!! Copy just suck, I need to improve it! I need to spend another $1,000 for a copywriter...

You have just 50 milliseconds...

Yes, that's how much time you have to create credibility, trust and a 'visual appeal'

That's not enough to read a word...

That's not enough to see the video...

But it's enough to set your visitor's mind to think your site is legitimate, trustworthy and worth looking at.

Do you think it can help in in making more money?

First let me say that you templates are very good and I believe that individuals looking for your product will be apt to purchase from you, however, I hope what I say does not come across as being cruel, but you may wish to change the manner in which you are addressing your potential customers, because I feel as though I am buying from a fast talking infomercialist, with a few typos. Sorry.
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- Ken Strong 14 years ago
  
  It's pretty obvious that English is not your first language, and that's going to be a handicap as far as writing your own copy. But for a WSO I don't think it matters as much (as long as you're not selling writing services), especially since you've shown your templates so everyone knows what they're getting.
  
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David Merriman 14 years ago

I think it's fine, especially because the graphics are the main appeal to your sales letter, and like Ken said, it's a WSO.

The FAQ-style subheads are good, and over all there was nothing that offended me.

Except ... the headline was difficult to read. Have you tried regular ol' text for your headline?
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- TheProdigy 14 years ago
  
  I'd suggest hiring a good editor who's first language is english.
  
  "Every great writer needs a good editor. Every good writer needs a great editor."
  
  On another note, the templates are great looking. Tempted to pick up a few myself!
  
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Lucas Adamski 14 years ago

Yes I know, I have to get some editor
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