Need help with my Upsell page

by greatbizideas

Posted: 14 years ago 9 replies

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Hi,

I am organizing a tele-seminar/ webinar event with 6 Top Internet Marketers. You can view the details about the event at http://www.InfoSeminarsClub.com

You can give any suggestions to change on the event main page.

I need some help with the Head lines that I can use for my WSO and also for classified ads and blog posts.

Can anyone recommend any good catchy headlines that I can use to promote my event?

I would also like to get help with nice subject lines for sending out emails... I am paying some hefty amount to promote the event to someones email list(heard good reviews). So I am looking for some really catchy email subject lines that will get good click through's and conversions

I can pay for this help . I already paid a nice amount for my copy on my main event page.

ALSO.. my OTO/ upsell offer page info is crappy for now. You can find it here.
Info Seminars Club

Could you please give some suggestions on this...

Any help is appreciated.

Thanks
Reddy

#page #upsell

shamoonak1 14 years ago

Your OTO page is very bland. What is the conversion rate you are getting on this page?
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travlinguy 14 years ago

I just looked at the main page. First, center it and jack the template up to the top so there's not so much empty space. You're wasting valuable real estate.

You've got WAAAAAY too much non-specific stuff up front and it doesn't read easily. Forget the sensational mumbo jumbo and get to the point already. It's almost impossible to tell what this page is about. You need to get very specific that you're holding a Free Internet Marketing seminar. Very simple. Something like:

If You've Been Struggling To Make Money Online Attend This Free 6-Day Seminar And Pick The Brains Of Six Successful Marketers.

That's off the cuff but it's far more direct and it clearly states what this is all about. I didn't read much of the rest and until you get a benefit-filled headline up there others probably won't either. Good luck.
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Kevin-VirtualProfitCenter

14 years ago

Your squeeze page CRIES OUT FOR VIDEO! You have a good offer. Really. It's good. It's so good it's amazing when one actually gives some thought to it.

But nobody's going to give thought to it.

Make a good quality, non-creepy video. Get rid of the cheesy, amateur look and feel and go with something simple.

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travlinguy

14 years ago

Originally Posted by Kevin-VirtualProfitCenter

Make a good quality, non-creepy video. Get rid of the cheesy, amateur look and feel and go with something simple.

Just for the record, non-creepyvideo.com is available.

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Kevin-VirtualProfitCenter

14 years ago

Originally Posted by travlinguy

Just for the record, non-creepyvideo.com is available.

Havyaever seen one of those videos where a guy is too close to the camera and he's talking to slow and kinda weird and breathy as he tells you about how great the new product is going to be? That's what I mean. If I had a link handy I would show it to you.

Edit: Found One!

YouTube- edarem - Pretty Woman

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travlinguy

14 years ago

Originally Posted by Kevin-VirtualProfitCenter

Havyaever seen one of those videos where a guy is too close to the camera and he's talking too slow and kinda weird and breathy as he tells you about how great the new product is going to be? That's what I mean.

Yeah, I get what you're saying. Kinda like the Bozos In Washington, DC. Verrrrry creepy...

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BrianMcLeod 14 years ago

Originally Posted by travlinguy

Just for the record, non-creepyvideo.com is available.

Kevin's video would require totally-freakin-creepy-video.com
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- Kevin-VirtualProfitCenter 14 years ago
  
  Originally Posted by BrianMcLeod
  
  Kevin's video would require totally-freakin-creepy-video.com
  
  I think I look pretty good in the video.
  
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greatbizideas 14 years ago

Thanks everyone for your comments. I'll make the necessary changes soon.

Please keep the suggestions coming....
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