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review of my salespage

by buckknife1
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Hi, I'm a new member here and just recently launched a new site. I'm just looking for some honest reviews of my sales copy on the sales page. Does anyone have any tips and ideas for a guy's first clickbank product?

All help would be greatly appreciated.
Thanks.

www[dot]powerforummarketing[dot]com
#review #salespage
  • Profile picture of the author Andrew Gould
    The link is:

    Forum Marketing Secrets

    Who are you? Why are you making this offer? Why should I buy from you? You're going to need some sort of credibility and proof elements.

    Your second bullet says your product will tell me the importance of forum marketing - that's what your sales page should be doing. You need to let me know why it's vital that I become a forum marketing expert.

    What's the benefit? What do I get out of it? You need more bullets, or more copy, fully explaining this. You're telling me what I'm getting but not why I should be getting it.

    In fact, it contains such powerful information I may just have to go into hiding for my own safety! - This seems completely believable.

    'It's now or never' - ?? Are you going to be taking the offer down?

    Hope this helps.
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    • Profile picture of the author buckknife1
      Thanks for the input. Both replies so far have given me a lot of direction. I'll get working on the suggestions right away.

      If anyone else has input, please let me know.

      Thanks,.
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  • Profile picture of the author TheKeys
    Since alot of warriors said what I have noticed..

    Lets talk about 2 things..

    #1 - Your keywords.. for me it doesn't seem like the majority of people are going to search your long-tailed keywords to find advice on forum marketing. You are competiting in a VERY competitive market

    #2 - The price... I've looked at other competitors and theirs are $7.99-$29.99 so I am unsure of why yours is so high. Maybe better quality.. but just ask yourself.. "How much are you willing to buy this product for?"
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    • Profile picture of the author Bill Jeffels
      You have some good bullets in there.

      Price was mentioned, so you might want to throw something in there justifying the price. They're getting a $97 value for $47. Something like that.

      You have a good guarantee. You should strengthen your P.S. a little by putting your big benefit in there again. And you mention your 60 day guarantee in your P.S so that's good.

      Good luck with it,


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      • Profile picture of the author garyadams281
        So far, as I read your the content of your site, it is good, all the essential elements that a good site must posses are there.

        good luck!
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        • Profile picture of the author ovidiu
          One thing that I would do is put my signature above my name. I know everyone's been doing this for ages but all "high converting"sales letters that I've seen have one.
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          • Profile picture of the author PJ Harmsworth
            Some suggestions:

            1) I think that the font spacing needs to be more even (it looks 'justified') and maybe a different font (still a common font though).

            2) Buyers tend to go for 'loss' rather than 'gain', so maybe illustrate boldly the fact that this product is usually $97, but for a limited time only, it is just $47. Use bold red on the prices, with a slash through the $97 text.

            3) Like others has stated, we need to know your credentials. Who is Eric Baglio? Why should I buy from him? What makes him qualified to give me this advice (sell me this programme)?

            4) Maybe add an embedded video towards the top of the page with you giving a confident message about the product. If someone sees a physical image of Eric Baglio, it helps give authenticity to your offer (not just some made up copy/name etc).

            5) Maybe a 'don't leave just yet' squeeze page, if the visitor clicks to leave your sales page.
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  • Profile picture of the author Spyros
    Moreover, video. Many people do not bother reading. Provide a video with yourself explaining your offer.

    And credibility. Who are you ? Are there people who tried your product and liked it ? Provide their thoughts.
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