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I have a new site/service that is for churches and I wrote up an email to send to pastors and would love your expertise
Dear {pastors name}: How many of these statements are true about you? • Our church is not growing as well as I'd like it to be. • I would love to be able to instantly keep in contact and update our church members! • I want to grow our church in size and spiritually! • I want to spread Gods word worldwide! If you answered "yes" to any of the above statements, keep reading because we've got the answer you've been waiting for. Finally, there is a way to make growing and discipling a church easier for pastors just like you. It's my pleasure to introduce Focus On The Church. This amazing new service will change your life and ministry forever! Through a specially designed process, focus on the church can help you achieve the level of growth you've been working towards. Imagine being able to get more members by using the one thing everyone uses(internet)! Being able to contact your church members, disciple them, update them, and grow them instantly and conveniently! You can experience these fantastic results for yourself. Because right now, as a special introductory offer, you can get a FULL listing and membership for only $19.97. That's $10.00 off the regular launch price. We are offering such a great deal as our introductory special offer that will be ending soon, so secure your lifetime locked in price by taking us up on our special offer and you can see for yourself the revolutionary results that focus on the church will have on your church! One more thing, if you're not absolutely convinced that a listing with us will help your church grow and bring your ministry up to date then we'll give you a 100% no-questions asked refund. You just can't lose! To sign up for your listing just head on over to List Your Church With Us! today." Sincerely, Dennis Cheesman CEO Focus On The Church P.S. Remember, there is absolutely no way that you can lose - except by not taking me up on this introductory offer. I personally guarantee that you will not be disappointed and will ONLY have great things to say about focus on the church.. Don't delay. |
regards,
Dennis
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