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Need Some Constructive Criticism of my Video Sales Page!

by Absulote
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#constructive #criticism #page #sales #video
  • Profile picture of the author fut
    First things first, the quality of the audio immediately tells me this seems 'unprofessional.'

    Check out CNET for reviews on some good microphones.
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    • Profile picture of the author Absulote
      Thanks! i was thinking the same thing! Do you think that is mainly the quality of the microphone??
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      • Profile picture of the author RickDuris
        I couldn't get through the full video. But then again, I am not your target market.

        But my guess is NOT that it is too long, but that it is not compelling enough. I think you need stronger copy.

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  • Profile picture of the author The Copy Nazi
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    Groan - "this video won't be online long". Possibly because it's a dud. A yawnfest. Boring as. Sounds like a high school class...no wait...high school class was more interesting than this schlock.

    Sorry. I call it as I see it.
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    • Profile picture of the author Absulote
      Thanks mal.. was looking for something more than: your copy sucks, from a copywriter... but thanks all the same!
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      • Profile picture of the author The Copy Nazi
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        Originally Posted by Absulote View Post

        Thanks mal.. was looking for something more than: your copy sucks, from a copywriter... but thanks all the same!
        Yeah yeah...we get that all the time. You won't learn anything with that attitude. Thing is...we're working...we drop in here for a break...we don't have time to do a full-on appraisal...just a quick review. I spent 17 hours online the day I made those comments. Get it?

        What I'm telling you is that the copy sucks and needs to be re-done. Ditto the audio. Do that and come back. Without the attitude. I could go through it line by line but haven't the time or inclination. Especially when basically it sucks. But the take away from my original comments was "gee...do you think I might be pushing it by claiming "this video won't be online long" (false scarcity) and perhaps you've done that 'cause you see others doing it. How many people fall for that BS do you think?
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        • Profile picture of the author Absulote
          Ha .. thanks again.. no attitude here! It actually wont be online long there big guy...only 1 week! so no BS! ha! and 3.4 out of 100 "fell" for it.. Any other questions let me know? And Ill get on those changes! thanks!
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  • Profile picture of the author davemiz
    Mal.... you're layin the smack down on this one eh?

    for me the script didn't have any 'juice' in the beginning....

    the audio was shoddy (get a decent mic and you'll be in heaven)

    the page layout was horrible.

    simplify. simplify simplify.
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    • Profile picture of the author Absulote
      Thanks.. Dave. Yeah I pulled the Advertising for now until I get it redone even thou it had a pretty high conversion rate. The audio does suck, I was kind of partial to the layout thou. any suggestions?
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  • Profile picture of the author davemiz
    just keep it simple. look at the top sellers on CB for example.

    look for patterns.

    there's a weight loss one i see everywhere.... using a video.

    Take what you've got, then just split test it vs some other styles and let the software tell you what works best.... never know, that ugly one might be the best converting one. :-)
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