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I posted my website on general marketing and asked if the video worked.

I had a bunch of feedback about it and I changed it to what it is now.

I asked if there are sales copy experts to provide me feedback to see if I am on the right path, so since I noticed this discussion topic, that is the feedback I am looking for from here. Take a look at my signature for the link.

Thanks warriors your feedback is awesome!
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  • Profile picture of the author RickDuris
    Originally Posted by camandi View Post

    I posted my website on general marketing and asked if the video worked.

    I had a bunch of feedback about it and I changed it to what it is now.

    I asked if there are sales copy experts to provide me feedback to see if I am on the right path, so since I noticed this discussion topic, that is the feedback I am looking for from here. Take a look at my signature for the link.

    Thanks warriors your feedback is awesome!
    Ok, here goes...

    1. You're talking too fast. Slow down.

    2. I really think you don't know your market. And therefore, the information and your power words and phrases are too generalized, too vague and too ambiguous.

    3. An affiliate opportunity? Oh my goodness. Are you selling a product or selling an opportunity? Pick one.

    4. I think you need to stir up the pain of not having a viable investment strategy/plan more. It's gotta hurt before you offer the solution and the hurt has to resonate with the audience. They have to identify with it.

    5. Your own story is not compelling enough because you don't give details, there's no emotion.

    6. I realize you have a lot to say and it's scripted but if you came out from behind the curtain, and talked casually, you'd probably connect with your market more.

    7. There's nothing that differentiates your offer. What makes it unique compared with all the other investment programs out there? There are tons...

    I know I sound rather negative, but I appreciate your ambition. And I hope you do well.

    What I would do is research competitive offers and see what markets they focus on, their delivery and their execution.

    - Rick Duris
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    • Profile picture of the author wcmylife
      Hi,

      My advice would be to get a sales script for your video and play off that - either read it direct or use it as a frame work to get your message out.

      It needs to be a lot more specific to really reach your niche. And if you are worried about reading a script on video, dont worry Jeff Walker did just that on PLF 3 and did pretty good
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  • Profile picture of the author camandi
    Thanks for the feedback, I know most of my sales will come from referral, as it is for the affiliate marketing, I try to tie this into the fact it can help build an investment fund and I talk about this very little as I mention it will be addressed more in the end of the video for those interested.

    I am trying to marry the marketing opportunity as an additional benefit and apply that to a mass majority of people who sell internet products, as well the fact that this is very marketable product that applies to the world and everyone you may know.

    That is the main reason why I try to tie in the marketing opportunity above and beyond the benefits of the product.
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