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Which headline will grab attention and earn me millions?

by caseym
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Fellow Warriors,

I've followed the advice from several web sites and am spending a long time working on the headline for my landing page.

My web site offers a new way for real estate agents to reach military personnel before they show up at a base. If they follow my instructions, they will be the first person contacted by a new military member moving to the area.

So here's what I have so far:
  • How to Reach Military on the Internet and Expand Your Real Estate Business
  • The Secret to Getting Military to Contact You First
  • How to Sell Real Estate to Military and Become Wealthy
  • An Insider's View: How Military Really Search for a Home and How You can Benefit
  • How Military Look for Real Estate - It's Not What you Think
  • The Secret of Military Contacting You Before they Arrive at their Next Base
  • How to Fill your Inbox with Targeted Military Real Estate Leads

Any advice will be welcomed!

Thanks,
Casey
#attention #earn #grab #headline #millions
  • Profile picture of the author Alex Cohen
    If they follow my instructions, they will be the first person contacted by a new military member moving to the area.

    "How To Eliminate The Competition... And Be The First Real Estate Agent In Your Area Contacted By Newly Arrived Military Personnel!"

    (with apologies to the Short Headline Police)

    Alex
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    • Profile picture of the author sethczerepak
      Originally Posted by Alex Cohen View Post


      "How To Eliminate The Competition... And Be The First Real Estate Agent In Your Area Contacted By Newly Arrived Military Personnel!"

      (with apologies to the Short Headline Police)

      Alex
      Love it. I'd remove the first five words though. The second part already implies it, maybe test a question version too...

      "How Would You Like to be the FIRST Real Estate Agent Contacted by Newly Arriving Military Personnel?"
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  • Profile picture of the author travlinguy
    Your Own Personal, Captive Customer Base - Get The Inside Scoop On Selling To The Millitary Market.
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  • Profile picture of the author caseym
    Thanks guys these are really good. The "Eliminate the competition" is very tempting. Do you ever worry about being too "salesy" though? Or does that really matter?
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    • Profile picture of the author Alex Cohen
      Originally Posted by caseym View Post

      Thanks guys these are really good. The "Eliminate the competition" is very tempting. Do you ever worry about being too "salesy" though? Or does that really matter?
      Too "salesy"? No. A sales letter should be persuasive and not be apologetic about asking for the order. And that starts with a headline that gets their attention.

      Tone and word usage are another matter. Each niche is different, so you want to speak to your prospects appropriately.

      What's the conversation going on in their minds? How do they think and speak about their problem? Be as congruent with that as you can.

      Alex
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  • Profile picture of the author Kim Davis
    Do What No Other Real Estate Agent Is Doing To Capture The Military Market

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  • Profile picture of the author Bruce NewMedia
    PREHEAD:
    Notice To Realtors looking for new markets...

    HEAD:

    "The Average Military Family Can Put $12,500 in Your Bank Account IF You
    Know This Closely Guarded Secret"

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  • Profile picture of the author joshril
    ATTENTION: Local Military Personnel Are Looking For A Home Right Now...
    Find Out How You Can Be Their New Realtor!


    ATTENTION: Local Military Personnel Are Looking For A Home Right Now...
    Are They Calling You Or Your Competition?

    I couldn't sleep and I wrote these at 5am... I'll take another look tomorrow and suggest a better headline...
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  • Profile picture of the author grandmasterflash
    The military buys a house every three minutes -- will it be from you?

    Soldiers will break down your door...
    to buy a house from you!

    Recession-proof your real estate business: military families are still buying houses
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    • Profile picture of the author cashmagnet
      Trial and error, test all of them
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  • Profile picture of the author caseym
    All,

    Thank you so much! All of these are really good. I'll probably test a few to see how they perform.

    Alex, good point on not being apologetic in asking for the sale. I should probably just go for it and stop being polite.

    Thanks,
    Casey
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  • Profile picture of the author thaggins
    Have you published this page yet? If so what is the url?
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  • Profile picture of the author davemiz
    dude. you're doing this ALL WRONG.

    rookie mistake.

    take all those headlines.

    setup a split test.

    send traffic.

    let the TRAFFIC tell you what works.

    No one here can tell you.
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  • Profile picture of the author tigreroar
    I don't need a headline..I'm a broker and I'm interested...I operate a successful small brokerage office in Maryland and we are closed to major bases and I'm interested In exploring this niche
    My email is
    Fernando@reallynicehomes.com

    Thanks.
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  • Profile picture of the author eugenedm
    There is no such a thing as the ultimate headline. You have to find something catchy but don't get hung up on it. For example, a great headline "Stop Snoring Now!" Something that makes a person stop and read it.
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  • Profile picture of the author max5ty
    "How To Use Real Estate Drones To Target The Military"
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  • Profile picture of the author Rich7
    Split test to see which line gets more clicks / conversions.

    I don't know if that sounds complicated to set up.

    But it's not: it's really easy -- takes about one minute to set up.

    If you have Google Analytics, click Content>Experiments in your Analytics account.

    google content experiments - YouTube
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    Highly Capable Copywriter
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