Newbie in copy writing - Need Help with sales page critique
Let me me keep it short and straight to the point.
About a 9 days ago I was recently graciously challenged right here in the warrior forum to go and make money in another niche before getting the help I needed on a certain project I was working on.
I actually decided to take the challenge head on, and I have not stopped since then...
I have therefore decided to take massive action and surpass myself.
Here is what I did:
1. I found a hot buying niche (relationships..dating and getting ex back).
2. Did extensive research and created a Free report and a product (e-book)
3.Found and reserved a SEO domain name
4.Outsourced the graphic design of my e-cover
5.Modified a converting squeeze page and sales letter
Here is where I need your help guys.....it's on point no. 5
If you don't mind, can you guys RIP apart my sales letter?? I can handle criticism....I know we have some amazing pros in this community, and where else would I go?
Please RIP away!!
PART I
How To Get Your Ex Back In Six Steps And How To Keep Them For Good"
From: Richard Hermann
RE: Get Your Ex Back And Change Your Life Forever
You know, I haven't always been a " Relationship expert".
I was more like a clueless, and overly "nice guy", who kept getting dumped every single time! It would come in the form of:
"I need some space...let's take a break" type phrases. These two phrases are responsible for the radical changes that occurred in my life that made me who I am today.
I didn't get the "get out now...!" or the "It's over...I'm breaking up with you" lines. NO.
Instead, I got the real soft but extremely painful rejection of "needing space to sort personal stuff out" and all what not.
Plus, I usually had the "dagger in the heart" request to REMAIN friends.
Meet Erin. When Erin and I met, it was nothing but sparks and chemistry flying all over the place. We kept on getting "...Oh...you guys are so sweet together", and " ...You guys were really meant to be together".
Apart from living under the same roof, Erin and I did everything else together. We even once took a 3-weeks trip to Europe, and stayed a whole FULL week in Paris!
Our relationship continued to thrive, and this continued for 4-years! Yes, we had our little fights and squabbles, but nothing different from what other couples were going through.
This continued until one day Erin made a comment that really caught me off-guard.
Here is what she said....and I quote:
"Richard, you are an amazing guy and you are so sweet and good to me..." That's about all I remember hearing!
When I sort of came back to my senses, she was staring at me waiting for me to answer a question that I had obviously not heard, nor understood.
Basically, what Erin was asking me was if it was Ok that we took some time off, just so she could sort out some personal issues. So, she just wanted to check with me if I was Ok with that. Naturally, my response was:
"Sure...no problem Erin!"
In my heart, I knew right there and then that this was the beginning of the end of our relationship...and yes, I was right. It was the beginning of the end.
What followed is too long to describe. Suffice to say that I made a total fool of myself, and in the process drove Erin very far away. Sad story...but true!
To make a very long story short, I ended up having another identical break up experience.
These two break up experiences acted as the trigger that pushed me to start asking some very brutally honest questions about myself, and relationships as a whole.
I spent the following 7 years applying and testing the getting your ex back system that you are about to discover
In the process, I helped many friends and relatives to see things straight, and rekindle relationships that looked bleaker than a Tsunami alert.
Some of the people I helped realized that their ex did not deserve them, and moved on, while several others succeeded in getting their ex back, but under their own terms, and with redefined standards.
The underlying and recurrent theme that keeps coming up in all these instances is that
ALL couples if given the RIGHT TOOLS can be reunited!
This is why I have written this book. So, please, allow me to help you.
I know things are hard right now, because I have been through this, and have helped countless others get through their "hell".
Do you ever wonder why it can be so hard to get over a breakup? You try everything out there, and nothing seems to really work.
Well...
I am about to reveal to you a powerful method to get your ex back... without losing your dignity ... in little to no time... Want to know the secret?
- Heal and master your emotions, and make yourself even more IRRESISTABLE.
- Discover how simple it is to get your Ex to call you NO MATTER how bad the break up was.
- 6 essential steps to getting your ex back under YOUR terms
- Get to the bottom or what REALLY happened and permanently fix all the damages... and make your ex commit like never before.
- Easy, fast and effortless ways to attract your ex back even if they are already with someone else.
- Overcome hurdles you'll find when attempting to win your ex back and how to leap those hurdles like you are a gold medal sprinter at the Olympics!
- Discover practically unknown secrets that are being used by a select few to attract and keep their partners
- Know if your Ex is that "special one" and what to do if they are not
- Determine when is the right time to reestablish contact with your ex
PART II
First off, this is not for everyone. If you are not ready to ask yourself some hard and honest questions, you will not benefit from this book. I have made it a mission of mine to help ONLY those who WANT to be helped. Which one are you?
There is no magic blue pill or red pill for you to take that will AUTOMATICALLY bring your ex back. There is no such thing except in movies maybe.
Let's face it, I know you are in pain right now, and you could just about gobble any and everything just to feel better and get out of this terrible situation you are in.
The methods I cover in my guide have been used on friends, relatives and strangers.
Plus....
Each method has been personally used by me to obtain many spectacular results.
The big question is.....will it work for you? I am no magician, but I am as close to one as you can get.
Anyone who GUARANTEES you 100% success is to be looked upon with caution. Think about...even doctors cannot guarantee the outcome of the simplest of operations, yet you trust them right?
If you follow the guide and the EXACT order of the action steps I have laid out for you, you will be amazed at the results you get.
Plus, for those of you who decide to join me in this journey here are 3 additional FREE powerful bonuses you will be receiving as members of my inner circle:
ü Monthly Webinars with myself and other relationship experts
ü Continuous Tips and Advice
ü Instructional videos and recordings
ü Access to my other books and resources on relationships
For those of you who are ready to really roll your sleeves up and put my system to work, and can prove to me that you are applying the techniques detailed in the guide, you will have SPECIAL and DIRECT access to me and my circle of experts on EVERYTHING that has to do with having and maintaining successful relationships.
the rest should be fine.
Thanks guys
Richard
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