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First Online Sales Letter: I need warrior reviews

by gcjmarkets
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I am working on learning how to write online copy, and to get experience I have offered my services free to a few warriors.

I have done the first copy but I don't feel that it is exactly there yet and I need a new set of eyes. I appreciate all the help you can give; thanks in advance
#letter #online #reviews #sales #warrior
  • Profile picture of the author gcjmarkets
    I got in a hurry and forgot to include to link (sorry)

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  • Profile picture of the author stoica
    I'll will give you some design tips:
    - try using a black background, it will make the reader focus on the content
    - use a more strident color for your headlines
    - use a different font (maybe hand writing font) for the headlines, the headlines are one of the most important aspects of a sales letter
    - put the ecover in the top of your letter

    On my blog I've put togheter some of the most important aspects of writing a sales letter, you can take a look if you want
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  • Profile picture of the author Rick Johansson
    I think your headline could be stronger. Put more specifics (actual numbers) and make it more benefit-based). In other words, why should I care?

    Overall, it is not a bad sales letter...just needs a headline that jumps out at me more (I probably wouldn't have kept reading if I wasn't doing a critique).

    Rick
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    • Profile picture of the author gcjmarkets
      Hi Rick Thanks alot
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