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Review my first sales page, please

by AlexMaker
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Hello warriors!

I'm running a site where people can apply different photo effects on their photos or edit them online.

Recently I've added Premium subscription for those who want to unlock all effects (I have several tools Premium only), save bigger results and remove any advertising.

Here is the "simple sales page" I currently have:

anymaking[dot]com/upgrade (sorry can't do links yet)

it converts not so good.

Here is my first sales letter I want to try instead of an old one:

anymaking[dot]com/up

I will be very appreciated for any advice how I can improve it to make people click on "Add to cart" button.

Thank you!
#page #review #sales
  • Profile picture of the author virginiad
    Hi, Alex

    I am looking at the second page, not the first.

    You should have a native speaker review your grammar. It is pretty good, but there are some phrases that need correction.

    Your headline is a bit vague (ie how much time would they save, how much money could they earn?) Be more specific. The grammar in your headline is awkward, too. The headline has to really grab them and want them to read further.

    I would also make the headline a brighter color.

    One the actual sales page there should be no links out (like you have at the top of this one). The reader should have only one option..."click here to order" or leave the site. You could have a pop up when they leave asking for their email in exchange for an ebook, video, whatever.

    You might want to raise the price a bit. Sometimes if it is too low the reader gets the impression that it is a worthless book. This is something you would have to test.

    Hope this helps

    Virginia
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  • Profile picture of the author Kathy_T
    Hi Alex,
    In addition to Virginia's advice, I would add: How about a photo of yourself up above the fold, so that people see you are "real?"

    With regard to Virginia's mention of a brighter color for the headline - I have been told by my business mentor that Red tends to be one of the best colors for a headline - I cannot site any specific study, just my mentor's words (and since he's successful, I tend to trust his judgement).

    Also, in addition to the comment to check the grammar, also have someone proofread for spelling errors in general. (e.g. under "It's a great timesaver" you have "It can take you from 10 minutest to..." when it should read "...from 10 minutes..." Believe me... It's always a good idea to have someone else read your copy! (My husband reads mine and almost always finds something that I missed. )

    Keep up your good work!
    Kath
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  • Profile picture of the author AlexMaker
    Thank you for the great feedbacks!
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  • Profile picture of the author jtunkelo
    - SHOW what the difference is, since this product is all about the visuals. Where are the product screen shots, the before and after, etc.?

    - The benefits need fleshing out. Time saver, money saver.. why don't you just let them know upfront what exactly is great about the product?

    - I don't see a guarantee. You'll pretty much automatically multiply your sales by adding a great money back guarantee.
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    • Profile picture of the author AlexMaker
      jtunkelo, thank you!

      Originally Posted by jtunkelo View Post

      - The benefits need fleshing out. Time saver, money saver.. why don't you just let them know upfront what exactly is great about the product?
      hmm.. I thought, time/money saver are pretty good benefits.

      Could you please clarify what I have to write instead of it? (some little example would be great)

      Thank you!
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