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Critique this Sales Page and Video

by OnlineInf0
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I just put this out there....don't know how it will do...but would like your opinion on the squeeze page and then the sales page.

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Looking forward to your input!
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  • Profile picture of the author Michael Ten
    took to long to load, imo. like 9 seconds and no connection. could be my connection, but everything else is working pretty alright
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    • Profile picture of the author helisell
      I think (only think mind...not know) that it is just a bit too busy on the squeeze page.

      Do you want me to watch...listen...both....and or read the other stuff?

      If I try all of those I lose interest very quickly.

      What's the single biggest benefit you are offering?

      Try focussing on THAT and ONLY that with a REALLY COMPELING HEADLINE .....and I think you'll see abetter result.

      My .02c


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  • Profile picture of the author jtunkelo
    This really should be self-evident, but let's repeat again: Do NOT place competing elements on a squeeze page!

    Here you have a banner, uh I don't know how many attempts at a headline, bullets, highlights, a video at the BOTTOM (?!)... Really, how do you expect people to respond?

    And add to that a tune that splits the ear if you haven't exited already. You're practically asking for people to go away, right away.

    So rethink. What is it that you really want to say, then put that in a headline, followed by well thought out bullets. ONLY add a video on top if you can make a better case with it than the written copy.
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    • Profile picture of the author kharrison
      Yeah, just one way: sales letter/video (not both) with a big fat arrow telling them to click for what you want them to do next.

      You're on the right track IMO.
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      • Profile picture of the author OnlineInf0
        Thanks for all the input! Time to make some changes and try again.
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        • Profile picture of the author Zodiac108
          I would change the way you are targeting people - but then maybe I'm not your target demographic. It just so happens I'm looking for just such a product but I already know about keyword tools, SEO etc.


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  • Profile picture of the author JanPat
    Lose the dot dot dots (...) in your headline. Lose the flash.

    Current page doesn't compel me to look any further. Sordy.
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