Critique my copy pleeease
I purchased the adweek handbook. I also went over the checklist in the sticky.
The purpose of this ad is to sell in person dating coaching. What do you think? It's for Craigslist.
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Learn to Attract Amazing Women Today
You can do it. I don't care how old you are, how tall you are or how fat you are or bald you are or anything in between.
I know a secret about women....
A great big secret.
They don't care either.
Attraction is a skill you can learn. It's more than your money or your status. It's not a mumbo jumbo Oprah book. It's a talent that takes practice. Charm is a skill set we are all born with, but have somehow forgotten. At some point life beat it out of us.
Let's find that charm together. Come hang out with me. I will demonstrate live, what it looks like to be good with women.
You deserve to be happy. You deserve to have fun. You deserve to be a man that women desire. You can be this guy; it just takes some practice and guidance from a pro.
"But I can learn this on my own. I don't need help."
If you do nothing...then that is what you will get...nothing. You will wait around passively to meet that special someone that will never arrive. Or you can take action today and email me for a consultation. I actually care! It pains me to see men missing out on life.
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"What if my friend's find out? It's sort of weird."
Yes. It's sort of weird. Deal with it. When you are basking in the attention of beautiful women your friends will still think you are weird. All coaching information is strictly confidential.
I'm a world class dating coach. Every day I teach men of all shapes and sizes, races and ages, how to meet and attract beautiful women.
My techniques work--absolutely. I know because I used to be loser. I drank too much and watched bad tv and cried myself to sleep. But I had enough! I discovered some basic skills and philosophies that made me instantly more attractive to women. It also gave me purpose and self esteem.
Now six years later; I'm here to teach you everything I know.
"This was a great experience. Tim keeps it real and targets your weaknesses. Everything you do is broken down so that you actually understand everything." S.C. 23, Montreal.
"I had an amazing time with Tim. He just knows how to teach. I've never met so many great women in one weekend. It changed my life!" R.B. 45. Vancouver.
Email me for a free consultation. Create the future you desire.
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