Think you've got copywriting chops - how would you improve this?
It's pretty simple and straightforward but can you improve it? Keep in mind I'm not asking for a critique.
Also, so you know, it's not mine:
If you use Facebook, Skype, Windows Live Messenger, among many other social sites... this is the ideal phone for you.
The INQ¹ is not just any old web phone - It's designed to keep you in touch with others.
I've had this phone for just under a year and it's worked great. Couldn't be happier (Unless someone left me a few million in their will).
If it's so good, why am I selling it?
Good question.
I just got a new phone and I don't need this one any more. It's really that simple.
The phone you're bidding on is in perfect working order.
However, I feel compelled to let you know that there are a few scratches, both on the case and the screen. But it doesn't affect the use of the phone in any way.
Also, as it has been used, the standby is approximately one day and talk time is about one hour of continuous use. It has 50MB internal memory and comes with a 3.2 Megapixel Camera.
Please keep those things in mind when you bid. I think you'll find it's a small price to pay for such a great phone.
Go and check it out yourself and I think you'll agree.
Oh, I almost forgot to mention... here's what you get when you win the bid on this phone:
INQ¹ Social Phone (Black) on the 3 network
Charger
Earpiece
Battery
USB cable with driver CD
Manual on how to use all the functions of the phone.
And they all come in the original box.
Just so you know, this phone is currently going on Amazon for £80.00 on pay as you go.
One last thing: Please check the description properly as I will not accept any returns.
As soon I get payment I will send the item by Special Delivery - That means it's tracked and you get it by noon the next day, guaranteed.
There's no reserve, so happy bidding.
UK BIDDERS ONLY PLEASE - I WILL NOT SEND THIS ITEM OVERSEAS.
Also, so you know, it's not mine:
The Mobile Phone That Makes It Easier To Socialise
If you use Facebook, Skype, Windows Live Messenger, among many other social sites... this is the ideal phone for you.
The INQ¹ is not just any old web phone - It's designed to keep you in touch with others.
I've had this phone for just under a year and it's worked great. Couldn't be happier (Unless someone left me a few million in their will).
If it's so good, why am I selling it?
Good question.
I just got a new phone and I don't need this one any more. It's really that simple.
The phone you're bidding on is in perfect working order.
However, I feel compelled to let you know that there are a few scratches, both on the case and the screen. But it doesn't affect the use of the phone in any way.
Also, as it has been used, the standby is approximately one day and talk time is about one hour of continuous use. It has 50MB internal memory and comes with a 3.2 Megapixel Camera.
Please keep those things in mind when you bid. I think you'll find it's a small price to pay for such a great phone.
Go and check it out yourself and I think you'll agree.
Oh, I almost forgot to mention... here's what you get when you win the bid on this phone:
INQ¹ Social Phone (Black) on the 3 network
Charger
Earpiece
Battery
USB cable with driver CD
Manual on how to use all the functions of the phone.
And they all come in the original box.
Just so you know, this phone is currently going on Amazon for £80.00 on pay as you go.
One last thing: Please check the description properly as I will not accept any returns.
As soon I get payment I will send the item by Special Delivery - That means it's tracked and you get it by noon the next day, guaranteed.
There's no reserve, so happy bidding.
UK BIDDERS ONLY PLEASE - I WILL NOT SEND THIS ITEM OVERSEAS.
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