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by Stefan Pylarinos
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#conversions #feedback #increase #needed
  • Profile picture of the author travlinguy
    Okay, I wonder how many people will buy a remedy for something that heals by itself. :rolleyes:

    Anyway... get rid of the 7-Step thingy. That's too much for most people and will work against you. Instead try something like, "our simple step-by-step method that even young school children find simple!" or something similarly patronizing... Good luck.
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  • Profile picture of the author Per Action Rob
    If you play around with the live version you're going to piss off the affiliates that are running traffic to it already so I'm assuming you're going to test it yourself privately.

    At the very least you have no exit pop on the main page. You should be popping a special offer, free report opt in, etc. Pretty hard not to increase profits by testing a few exit monetization strategies on a page that already makes sales.
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  • Profile picture of the author Bruce Wedding
    More paragraphs, in the copy and testimonial.

    Wow! Your testimonials scare me. I don't want to read 30-50 lines of solid text.

    Edit ruthlessly.
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  • Profile picture of the author Daniel Harper
    That's a really bloated headline.

    I agree with the sentiment that people aren't going to want to buy a cure for something that cures itself.

    Why not sell "relief" instead of "cure"?
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  • Profile picture of the author marketingintheveins
    You should change the headline to,

    "New 1 Click Software Stolen From Guru Rids Your Itchy Body Of Chicken Pox In One Hour Or Less... Guaranteed Or Your Money Back"

    That would convert like gangbusters!!

    And change the heading for the "Success Stories" to "Cured" or something related to what they your USP.

    Or "Another Chicken Pox Free Customer"
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  • Profile picture of the author ASCW
    I didn't go through this word for word. In fact I mostly skimmed it.
    So here's 1 quick take-away.

    Try to provide some more space in between sentences and paragraphs.

    There are too many walls of text that make reading more difficult than it should be.

    They don't "want" to read your copy.
    It's your job to make reading it easier than not reading it.

    That's it for now.

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  • Profile picture of the author andreac
    Spell check your main page. I spotted at least two major typos. While there are more strategic ways to improve, these are quick fixes that can help with conversion right away.
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  • Profile picture of the author nick1980
    Also, keep the font consistent throughout, and get rid of the huge, "shouty" bullet points. They're not necessary. If you keep the text neat and tidy, it will be a lot easier to read.
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  • Profile picture of the author Marty Foley
    You've been given some good advice in this thread so far.

    When boosting conversion rates also consider the quality of your traffic.

    I'd suggest putting Google Analytics on your site and setting up some conversion goals. Then analyze which traffic sources are working better for you, and ramp up the traffic sources that are working.

    Marty Foley ~ Traffic and Conversion Mad Scientist
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  • Profile picture of the author alsoforum
    I agree with the sentiment that people aren't going to want to buy a cure for something that cures itself.
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  • Profile picture of the author nateall
    I liked it overall, but for such a quick fix and low price of the product, I thought it was way too long. I found one typo with verb tenses:

    Remarkably, Almost All Chicken Pox
    Sufferers Who Used This System
    Was Cured Within 2-3 Days

    Good luck!
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  • Profile picture of the author Bruce NewMedia
    Header is actually pretty good, which is usually not the case....(great pic of kid with pox) but the copy is very long, and VERY DENSE.

    Paragraphs too long, testimonials too long, the page suffers from "oh my gosh, I can't read all this!" Long copy works best when it is easy to read and not intimidating.

    Graphically, the page suffers from the "Everything Is Big and Important" syndrome.
    ....some less important portions need to be reduced in size and emphasis.

    Another thought: Unconsciously readers may feel if the sales page is this long and involved, perhaps the 'cure' is also.
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  • Profile picture of the author yibanbana
    I am totally agree with your oppinion.this post is very encouraging to people who want to know these topics.
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  • Profile picture of the author brik2500
    Originally Posted by LifestyleTrans View Post

    ATTENTION COPYWRITERS!

    This is my sales page that I've had for several months now:

    How To Cure Chicken Pox In 3 Days Or Less - Fast Chicken Pox Cure

    It's a remedy niche site on how to cure Chicken Pox.

    My product is up on Clickbank. It has been converting and making me money every month, but I know it can be MUCH better.

    I do some testing here and there (right now testing an exit pop-up discount), but I am wondering if I can get some experienced copywriters to take a look at it and give me feedback.

    What can I do to improve conversions?

    FEEDBACK NEEDED!
    Hey,

    great effort. For some reason...Im using Fire Fox and

    there are huge spaces/gaps between the paragraphs...and some

    words are just HUGE....but I managed to get the gist of it.

    One thing that I would say is during the beginning, focus on the "pain"

    more.....by asking rhetorical questions that they may be facing....


    Are you having a hard time sleeping at night due to PAINFUL ITCHINESS?

    Is the itching so NERVE RACKING that you can barely stand it?

    Blah blah blah...


    then go into your spiel....


    hope this helps somewhat...
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