Sales Copy Critique - Checklist completed

I don't know if it's just me, but I would change the "invest" in your call to action to "try".

Invest sounds better suited for products than services in my opinion...

I'd suggest to create a real headline that encapsulates what it is you offer exactly, to whom and at what price. Then you can catch the rest of the points when you have their attention. It took me a while to realize what you're offering. Of course if people are coming in from ads it's different, but still the initial impact is important.

Also, a testimonial or two lifted fairly high would be a good touch. There's a lot of nickle-and-diming when people shop around for these kinds of services, so make sure you have something that clearly sets you above the rest; something in your process, in the way you serve customers, or a specific way how your writing is simply better.

Hey Daxcheng

Personally I would have take another angle of attack... I wrote this for you feel free to use it if you want...

If you use it please proof read I'm not a native english speaking person

Take care!

J

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I like it. Looks really good.

Good luck.