Can you critique my copy? Thanks
Right now I'm reading The Copy writing handbook-The Ultimate Guide To Writing by Joe Sugarman. Very interesting book and so it gave me an idea to try to write a short sales letter if you will for my landing page of my website to have people just sign up to my list to access website with bunch of free Concept Art tutorials. My goal is to build a list and in future offer them paid exclusive video tutorials. Right now I'm in a phase of testing. I get a few people a day to sign up but would like to increase. I used to get a lot more traffic when I didn't have this landing page. Let me know what you think and thanks in advance.
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I've added the p.s. part and stuff below it as a test to see if that would increase sign up.
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