Help me make this more compelling!

Okay, copywriting Warriors... I humbly acknowledge that I suck at copywriting, and hope that you can spare a few moments to help me make this copy more compelling. Thank you thank you thank you in advance for any feedback you have to offer!

Basically, my business partner and I are launching a product based off an eight-week case study we did where we took beginning affiliate marketers through the entire process of launching and growing a website.

I'm going to be announcing the product on Thursday, and want the text to be as compelling as possible. Here's what I've got so far...

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"Okay, so I know I've been dragging this out for a few weeks, but I'm finally ready to make that big announcement I've been promising you guys!

Drumroll, please...

As my regular readers know, my business partner Jon Alford and I spent the months of March and April coaching a group of beginning internet marketers on how to start an affiliate niche site from the ground up. We covered just about everything - from selecting a winning niche and keywords to choosing a site structure and optimizing content to actually promoting the site and getting traffic to it.

Throughout the entire eight weeks of what came to be known as the 2011 Community Marketing Challenge, we posted our results here for everyone to see. But what you might not know is that there was a ton more information being shared behind the scenes as well.

We developed a course guide for participants with weekly assignments and recommended resources...

We held weekly webinars where we shared information and answered questions...

We even built a forum that resulted in hundreds of posts - all full of great questions and answers to the biggest questions newbie internet marketers face...

But up until now, we haven't made this information available to the general public. And quite frankly, I think that's a shame, as just about any internet business owner - whether new or experienced - could benefit from the information we generated through the Challenge.

So today, I'm pleased to introduce the 2011 Community Marketing Challenge Course!
The Course will contain the exact information Jon and I shared with the CMC participants that helped them to get new affiliate marketing minisites up and running in eight weeks, complete with affiliate promotions and traffic coming in. If you've been struggling to gain traction with your internet marketing business, please read on...

When you purchase the Course, you'll get:

*Access to over four hours of video footage from the eight weekly webinars Jon and I held with the CMC participants.

*Your very own copy of the CMC Participant Workbook which will show you the exact steps you need to take in order to get your own affiliate website up and running in eight simple steps.

*Transcripts of all the CMC forum posts (I'm not kidding when I say that this part of the course alone is worth hundreds and hundreds of dollars in terms of the information shared).

*My special summary notes that include the lessons learned from the Challenge (and which cover the one thing that every new affiliate marketer absolutely must know to avoid failure!).

Jon and I put a lot of effort into making this a complete program that will help anyone get a site up and running quickly, but we know that not every program is right for every marketer. So here's who the 2011 Community Marketing Challenge Course isn't right for:

*Experienced internet marketers who have a defined step-by-step plan for building (and succeeding with) affiliate marketing websites.

*Affiliate marketers who are completely satisfied with the results they're achieving with their websites, whether in terms of sales, conversions or visitors.

*Anyone who's already generating the kind of passive income that allows them to pursue their dreams and live the lives they want.

If you don't fall into one of the above categories (and you'd desperately like to!), the 2011 Community Marketing Challenge Course is right for you!

If you've spent any time at all around Common Sense Marketing, you know that I love helping people start and succeed with the businesses that will change their lives - whether it's earning extra income to pay down debt or even quitting the mind-numbing, soul-sucking day jobs that are ruining their lives.

So rest assured that when I say with complete confidence that this program represents one of the most comprehensive guides to creating passive income generating affiliate marketing websites, I'm not just blowing smoke in your faces! I'm incredibly proud of the content Jon and I have put together, and I know you're going to love it.

The 2011 Community Marketing Challenge Course will officially launch on Tuesday, June 13th and will retail for $47. Quite frankly, I think that's a steal for the amount of valuable content you'll be getting, but for a limited number of early buyers, Jon and I will be releasing the course at a special launch price of just $27!

If you already belong to my email list, you'll get a copy of this coupon code automatically. If not, complete the form below to get your copy of the special launch coupon code:

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Hope to see you on the inside!

Sarah Russell
Common Sense Marketing"

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Again - thank you for anyone who's made it all the way through. I really appreciate your feedback!