Is this new 2.0. sales page design weak?

by link8 3 replies
Just converted this site from a long form sales letter to the current one you see now: www.fatburningsouprecipes.com

What do you think?

Any critics and suggestions are welcome =)

Thanks
#copywriting #design #page #sales #weak
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  • Profile picture of the author link8
    Thanks. What do you think about the call to action button?

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    I think that even though the site looks clean and professional
    the site is waaay too busy. Where do I start reading? It
    is not clear. Simplify and force the reader to start reading
    where you want him to start.

    You give your site visitors too many options and they select
    none.

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  • Profile picture of the author jtunkelo
    The product idea and positioning is pretty good, but you're killing it with overly busy design. Too many places to rest your eye => a good chance you'll lose them.

    Also the call to action seems to imply options, when in reality it's a $1 trial.

    Plus, it seems like a squeeze page but instead you're selling them something right away. Choose what you're going to achieve with this page and trim out the rest.

    Also, if I were interested in buying this product, I'd definitely like to see some form of price justification for spending $27 on new recipes. A book of recipes sure, but monthly?
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