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PLR Site- Built For Weight Loss Affiliates- How Can It Be Improve

by shawoon98
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Expert Copywriters,

This site sold 24 nos in 2 days in a WSO. I just tried to do my best in the copy. How can I improve my sell? Please help me with your wise advice.

Thanks in advance.

Weight Loss GoldMine
#affiliates #built #improve #loss #plr #site #weight
  • Profile picture of the author Studio13
    Here's some tips:

    0. This one's so important, I had to make it numbered 0. It took me getting to the end of your copy before I even knew what the offer was. Your headline and/or subhead should summarize your offer and create curiosity to read further.

    1. Fix the grammatical errors and get that bad boy proof read asap.

    2. Fix the capitalization mistakes throughout the entire body (never capitalize "A" in a headline). For example, you state, "Sell All The Products As A package". This should be modified to read, "Sell All Products as a Package". Lots of these need fixing.

    3. Your color scheme looks "okay" but towards the end you break your consistency and have a single phrase that reads click the button below in bold orange, while the rest of your headlines and subheadlines are in red. Try to be consistant and symmetrical to keep it attractive.

    3.5 You've got at least 4 different colored and stylized headlines throughout. Again, choose one or two colors and stay consistant. If you want to gradient filled + drop shadowed headlines, make sure you make them all that way else risk looking tacky.

    4. Your download now button should be centered, not justified to the left.

    5. You may want to block-quote much of your copy and keep it from riding the corner of your tables to make it easier to read.

    6. Lots more I would do with it, but that should get you started...

    I'd be willing to go through your copy, proof it, revise it, tune it up some and get it ready for print. PM me for details.
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    • Profile picture of the author shawoon98
      Originally Posted by Studio13 View Post

      Here's some tips:

      0. This one's so important, I had to make it numbered 0. It took me getting to the end of your copy before I even knew what the offer was. Your headline and/or subhead should summarize your offer and create curiosity to read further.

      1. Fix the grammatical errors and get that bad boy proof read asap.

      2. Fix the capitalization mistakes throughout the entire body (never capitalize "A" in a headline). For example, you state, "Sell All The Products As A package". This should be modified to read, "Sell All Products as a Package". Lots of these need fixing.

      3. Your color scheme looks "okay" but towards the end you break your consistency and have a single phrase that reads click the button below in bold orange, while the rest of your headlines and subheadlines are in red. Try to be consistant and symmetrical to keep it attractive.

      3.5 You've got at least 4 different colored and stylized headlines throughout. Again, choose one or two colors and stay consistant. If you want to gradient filled + drop shadowed headlines, make sure you make them all that way else risk looking tacky.

      4. Your download now button should be centered, not justified to the left.

      5. You may want to block-quote much of your copy and keep it from riding the corner of your tables to make it easier to read.

      6. Lots more I would do with it, but that should get you started...

      I'd be willing to go through your copy, proof it, revise it, tune it up some and get it ready for print. PM me for details.
      Not only I clicked thanks button but also I'm thanking you here again. Looks like you spent much of your valuable time assessing the site. I see that I still have lot to learn. I'll get these fixed quick. Thanks again.
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  • Profile picture of the author IdrisSG
    The simplest fastest way to learn how to ride a bicycle would be to get training wheels.

    You can get training wheels for copywriting too...

    Do a search for "Free Long Form Copywriting Templates" in Google...

    Good luck
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  • Profile picture of the author AnneE
    I felt like you spent a lot of time talking about how great it is to have articles -- that they give you SEO, bring visitors, etc. What I would add and maybe emphasize is why YOUR article pack. Where did these articles come from? Are they well-written? (either a sample or a testimonial is useful here). The other why of why your articles is the price can't be beat. 77 articles for $7.70 -- a dime an article, right?

    Oh... one thing, if you could include it or if you had it as an upsell, that would be great would be images for the Weight Loss niche. You have images on your sales page -- Are these ones you have rights to sell? Or could you get some to include with the PLR pack? Just a thought.

    A minor comment you have:

    You will be able to do whatever you want to do with those aricles-

    You are missing the 't' in articles there. Typos in text trying to sell PLR always makes people think the PLR will also contain typos.

    If you don't have any positive testimonials, you might want to offer a few review copies. If you do so and people reviewing aren't as enthusiastic as you hoped, then ask them for suggestions for making it even better.
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