Opinions on my classified ad copy..?

Well, all I have to say is that I will probably be purchasing an article from you now lol. It made me wanna drop $10 faster then any other post I've read here.

Unfortunately I can't offer any advice to improve it but it did convinced me that your service is great and well worth the money very effectively. Good sales copy.

Yea theres a lot of stuff you can do.

Think about the top three benefits your service offers, what does your article writing do for the client?

Then put those in a headline. You have a great USP. Now you need to talk about unique benefits of your service. Dont just talk about benefits of articles because that helps your competitors.

You should also make it so that YOUR solution is the ONLY solution to their problems. Knock out all of your competitors in your ad. Play up the gold standard, be the rolex of the article industry.

Being an Expert Ezine author myself (getting my account upgraded without pay) I have to say this line turns me off...

Or, you can pay 10x as much and wait a hundred times longer to get quality content you will be glad you paid big bucks for.

It works for people who are new to this or just plain suck at writing, but if I was looking for an article writing service, I'd like to know they write just as well as me and just as quickly as me. (Im not saying im some uber author... but you get the point here)

Change the 10x as much and the "big bucks" to "premium price". this sounds more high class.

To an owner of a Bently... he didn't pay "10x as much as a Honda civic"... he merely paid a "Premium Price" for a "Premium Product"

Do you get what I'm saying? He's not even comparing himself to the shitbox car. (no offense to civic owners)

So hope that helps you fine tune ur ad so that those people who CAN write (but are looking for writers on a busy day) will buy from you.

Cheers

I think you just picked up another customer.

I honestly don't know why I should hire you? No reason why copy....No USP....NO offer with a deadline...Bonus etc.

You might try the headline: Warning: Don't Hire an Article Writer Untill You Read This Message...then go on tell me what I need to know. Hope this helps pal

Actually, when it comes to outsourcing, one of the first things people want to know is "Is English your native language?".

Off the top of my head the Germanic languages have around 60,000 common words, the "romance" (Italian and French mostly) have around 80,000 common words. English? Close to 1000,000, not to mention bendy grammar rules etc.

My wife, who's Malaysian, is a uni lecturer and lectures in English. Everything she and her students write and say is in English. But she still asks me to proof-read her stuff because she knows I'll find 2 or 3 errors on every page, and I don't mean stuff like starting a sentence with "but"

You, Metal', may get away with it but 99.9% of non-native English speakers stand out as exactly that to native speakers.



B.


PS, for fun, this is exactly the kind of thing I mean:

"One last thing... get rid of that "non-native" thing. I know a lot of people who speak/write English as their second language and can write just as good if not better than some "native" english speaking folks.

How do I know? I'm ****ing one of em!"

In that case you're probably biased

Confused? If so you just made my point. If on the other hand you're insulted, you made it even more.

If you laughed, you're a native English speaker


B.

"Ha, biased? For that I would have to be insulted in the first place..."

That's what I mean, you missed the joke. It was in reference to this:

"How do I know? I'm ****ing one of em!"

Well I went one better and married one of them - but despite my bias I acknowledge her English isn't perfect


B.

The message: Wouldn't you agree that it is better to spend a little bit more, than a little bit less of what you actually expected? I see that as your main message. I would try telling a story to get this point across. People LOVE to read real life stories. You can draw them in with a story. So one example might be. A friend of mine, he laughed at my price and then went ahead and hired someone who does not speak English as their first language. . . He paid 1.00 to get the work done and he received the copy in about 1.5 hours. . . I asked him to see it, and I was shocked. NOT just shocked BUT angry. Who cares if he paid 1.00 or 20.00? The quality was poor and so on. . . OR, and this DOES NOT relate to your product, BUT it is a great story. My wife wanted a pair of shoes, she is very thrifty. She bought her shoes from some warehouse location. I could not believe she paid only 20.00! Well, within 2 months, the shoes were falling apart. They would not give her money back and they would not replace the shoes. She was furious, in fact they even tried to sell her another pair. She ended up going to HBC and spending another 80.00. Now she has spent 4 hours of her time on a pair of shoes AND 100.00.
Do you see my point? Tell a story, terrify the prospect that if they do not buy from you, then they are losing and might very well end up spending a small fortune in time and money. The fear of loss is greater than the desire for gain.
Sorry to babble. . . I hope this gives you some help. . .

I absolutely hate your ad however I like the concept of the product you are offering and I may become a customer.
( I only read the ad as a consequence of this thread)
The point here is that I would totally ignore your add as spammy rubbish which I see every day in my spam mail junk folder.
reams of headlines and sub headlines with an un needed qauntity of blurb and a never ending list of unsolicited positive feed backs from customers.

At the end of the day your ad does not clearly explain what you are offering and does not tell me how much it will cost and I need to click through to somewhere else to get that information.

Try a short headline (your headline is good but reduce the size)
then state clearly what you offer
how much it costs
why I should buy it
the turn round time
and tell me how to order

Hope this helps

If your using this to entice me to buy an article...it worked! I like it, except I do think that a little more is better than the 10x and do you really have to wait 100 hours? Let them think that it wouldn't cost them that much more time and money like maybe change it to "Or, you can pay a little bit more and wait a little bit longer to get quality content you will be glad you paid a little more for.