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Available to Critique My Sales Copy?

by Paula Steen
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Is there anyone who would be willing to give me a critique of some sales copy?

I am not sure if I can post the link publicly, but if anyone can help me out I will PM it to you.

Thanks so much!
#copy #critique #sales
  • Profile picture of the author Jake Dennert
    Hello Paula,

    I'd be happy to take a look at what you've got.

    Send it on over.


    Jake
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  • Profile picture of the author Paula Steen
    Thanks, Jake!

    I sent you the link in a PM.

    Paula S
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    • Profile picture of the author Jake Dennert
      Originally Posted by Paula S View Post

      Thanks, Jake!

      I sent you the link in a PM.

      Paula S
      Hey Paula,

      Got your PM, but I haven't had a chance to look at it yet.

      Something has come up (that I didn't PLAN on)... and I've got to get that out of the way first.

      I'll review your copy ASAP... and have an in-depth critique drawn up later on tonight -- tomorrow morning at the very latest.

      In fact, since I'm not able to get it back to use as quickly as usual...

      ...I'll be MORE thorough with it than I am for the majority that I do.

      Cool?

      Again, I apologize... and I'll talk to you soon.


      Jake
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  • Profile picture of the author travlinguy
    You can post the live link in your thread. You'll get many more takers if you do.
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  • Profile picture of the author Paula Steen
    Well... it's a link to a WSO, and I didn't know if a live link was allowed.

    Is it okay to place the link to a WSO here?

    Paula S
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  • Profile picture of the author Paula Steen
    Hi, Jake!

    I greatly appreciate ANY feedback you can give me... and there is definitely no rush. Anything I can learn from you, I will have with me for any future copywriting I try.

    Thanks again!
    Paula S
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  • Profile picture of the author Paula Steen
    Wow, Jake!

    I think that is the most thorough critique I have ever received for anything I've EVER written or made in my entire life.

    Your advice is INCREDIBLE. I learned more from seeing how you took each element of my copy and made it better, than I have from any WSO I've ever purchased.

    My favorite part was when you rewrote the line about the keywords...

    Original:
    "1,563 keywords related to diamonds and engagement rings!"

    Modified:
    "1,563 diamond and engagement ring keywords: Skip the boring research... I've done it for you! I've spent HOURS mining for these hidden gems. Can you say faster profits?"

    I knew that the keywords and EMDs were valuable, but I tried to make them stand out by making them bold and underlining them. LOL

    I'm going to print out your advice and make every change you recommend. I feel much more confident about being able to write sales copy for any future as well.

    You have been so generous with your time and expertise. Than you so much!

    If you would like any keyword/EMD research done, please let me know. I owe you BIG time!

    Paula S
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    • Profile picture of the author Jake Dennert
      Originally Posted by Paula S View Post

      Wow, Jake!

      I think that is the most thorough critique I have ever received for anything I've EVER written or made in my entire life.

      Your advice is INCREDIBLE. I learned more from seeing how you took each element of my copy and made it better, than I have from any WSO I've ever purchased.

      My favorite part was when you rewrote the line about the keywords...

      Original:
      "1,563 keywords related to diamonds and engagement rings!"

      Modified:
      "1,563 diamond and engagement ring keywords: Skip the boring research... I've done it for you! I've spent HOURS mining for these hidden gems. Can you say faster profits?"

      I knew that the keywords and EMDs were valuable, but I tried to make them stand out by making them bold and underlining them. LOL

      I'm going to print out your advice and make every change you recommend. I feel much more confident about being able to write sales copy for any future as well.

      You have been so generous with your time and expertise. Than you so much!

      If you would like any keyword/EMD research done, please let me know. I owe you BIG time!

      Paula S
      Hey, no problem at all Paula!

      Imagine what my paid work looks like.

      Let me know how things work out after
      you've made the changes.

      In my mind you don't "owe" me anything,
      but if I ever need some keyword research
      done, you're at the top of my list.


      Take care,


      Jake
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