Honest Feedback?

Hi Yoel,

Here's a few (hopefully helpful) thoughts:

Your headline is a pretty intimidating slab of text, I'd take a sledgehammer to it.

The video goes straight into how to use your plug-in, it could really do with a brief intro to let me know what it's all about.

There's a few slight mistakes throughout your copy but the one you definitely want to correct is in the second sentence of the body copy ("you're" wants to be "your").

The story of Google going to social media for the traffic doesn't quite seem to connect with the rest of the copy.

Your subheads want to be smaller, as well as breaking up the copy they're for catching scanners and you won't do that with a paragraph or two.

Your graphical explanation of how your plug-in works could do with being simplified, and I'd explain it in the body copy as well. You need to make sure the prospect's crystal clear on what they're getting, at the moment your copy's not quite achieving that.

Where's your proof? A screenshot of your traffic analytics before and after installing your plug-in would be great (and have it near the very top of your copy).

Make it clearer that it only needs installing on one WP site and then can be used on all their sites.

It looks like you're running some sort of dime-sale - make the urgency more obvious.

Simplify your PS section, or at least make it easier to read.

Awesome Andrew! Thanks on the very detailed feedback much appreciated.