How a one-word change, typos and bad grammar can double conversions

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What I'm about the share with you will make intuitive sense the minute I say it.

With it, I have seen firsthand conversions jump as high as 250%. You'll understand why in a moment. Implementation is key. But for now, an immediate boost in your conversions is what I would expect depending upon your implementation.

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We all know as copywriters, marketers and consumers, people online place very little trust in testimonials these days. (Remember the saying "I just read it in the newspaper, so it must be true." -- It's definitely not true online.)

It's almost as if the moment you see the word testimonial, you think "BS." Prospects may read the testimonial, but they don't BELIEVE the testimonial.

I have confirmed this by watching hundreds of clicktale.com movies. People read testimonials, yet many do not buy.

So what I did as a simple test was wherever in the copy it said "Testimonial" or "Testimonials", I changed it to say "Review" or "Reviews". The same thing goes for phrases like "Real World Success Story."

I promise you, I didn't change ANYTHING else.

Now the question is "Why does this work?" Here's my opinion:

Because of social media websites and the importance readers place on reviews, they have much more credibility. They carry more weight. The reader or prospect is more likely to believe them.

You can hijack this social media phenomena. Here's how:

On your blog or on your sales letter, you can allow people to post their own reviews. In other words, whatever they say is what they say about your product or service. A reviewer's articulation will probably include typos and bad grammar. Don't worry about them. They enhance not diminish the credibility of the review.

Now what happens if you get an occasional bad review? I say "Leave it." I know it hurts emotionally but it enhances the credibility of the OTHER REVIEWS. It creates contrasts.

This will further improve the believability/trust of your website or blog.

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You can take this strategy one step further. You can integrate your reviews with Facebook, Twitter and LinkedIn websites and fanpages. So that when a review comes in, it gets automatically pushed out to the top social media websites. There are various plugins which will allow you to do this, even for straight HTML websites.

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So if you have testimonials on your sales letter, go ahead and test changing the word "Testimonial" to "Review" and see if that boosts your conversions.

One last thing that will improve conversions: The STARS that you see on social media websites play a huge psychological role in the reading of the review. It's no secret that people look at the stars first, before they read the copy. It's like stars are a magnet for the eyes.

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As online marketers, the biggest hurdle we face is building trust as quickly as possible. This is one way to do it.

- Rick Duris

PS: Few can deny the impact of reviews, positive or negative. When business owners are forced to do things like below, you can get an inkling of how powerful they can be:

Dentist Forced Patient To Sign Away Future Copyright On Any Online Review; Then Billed Him $100/Day For Negative Reviews | Techdirt
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  • Profile picture of the author DGFletcher
    So true!

    In my weird little corner of the world (Utah Valley) "testimony" is what you call it when parents send their little kids up in front of the congregation at church and get them to tell the community the parent's opinion of how much they like church.

    I didn't like the word 'testimonial' even before nobody started trusting them.

    Review on the other hand, makes a ton of sense!
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  • Profile picture of the author DougBarger
    Yeah, Rick, I've done this for clients too.

    Used "Program Review" above the headline of each testimonial.

    Then at the bottom of the testimonial ever so often, provide a link to order
    with a strong call to action.

    It works.

    PS. Ryan Deiss and Perry Belcher revealed in one of their products the results of their split-tests confirmed this works too.
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    • Good stuff. I just finished some extensive research on reputation management for a white paper. This is interesting- some businesses are finding some negative online reviews actually increase sales. The thinking is that if every review is positive people discount all of them.
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    • Profile picture of the author RickDuris
      Originally Posted by DougBarger View Post

      Yeah, Rick, I've done this for clients too.

      Used "Program Review" above the headline of each testimonial.

      Then at the bottom of the testimonial ever so often, provide a link to order
      with a strong call to action.

      It works.

      PS. Ryan Deiss and Perry Belcher revealed in one of their products the results of their split-tests confirmed this works too.
      Did it work for you as expected, Doug?
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      • Profile picture of the author DougBarger
        Originally Posted by RickDuris View Post

        Did it work for you as expected, Doug?
        Yes Rick, it did. Now in the interest of fairness the full disclosure is it only increased sales conversions .11% against the version without the "Program Review" testimonial headline, but we took it. I forget how much of a bump it gave Ryan and Perry exactly,
        but they have another product called 43 split tests that tells. (<-Not sure if that one is still available?)

        A serendipity was when someone entered the product name + review in the search engine, the salespage came up!
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        • Profile picture of the author RickDuris
          Originally Posted by DougBarger View Post

          Yes Rick, it did. Now in the interest of fairness the full disclosure is it only increased sales conversions .11% against the version without the "Program Review" testimonial headline, but we took it. I forget how much of a bump it gave Ryan and Perry exactly,
          but they have another product called 43 split tests that tells. (<-Not sure if that one is still available?)

          A serendipity was when someone entered the product name + review in the search engine, the salespage came up!
          I've found how you implement the presentation of the review is everything. If it looks like it was sexed up, it could actually hurt conversions.

          - Rick Duris

          PS: I never thought about the SEO aspect of the word "review," but that's a great bonus, isn't it?!
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          • Profile picture of the author DougBarger
            Originally Posted by RickDuris View Post

            I've found how you implement the presentation of the review is everything. If it looks like it was sexed up, it could actually hurt conversions.

            - Rick Duris

            PS: I never thought about the SEO aspect of the word "review," but that's a great bonus, isn't it?!
            Yes sir, yessir. I was pleasantly surprised. And yes, you want the review as natural and candid as possible. Nothing too sexed up.

            As you well know, there's a time and place for sizzle for sure, but only
            when it's backed up by the steak come supper time.

            I know exactly what you mean. If the presentation appears contrived, forced or like it's trying too hard to make impact, then it loses its appeal
            in a heartbeat. In that sense, less becomes more. Although specific results never hurt to share when you've got them to share in my opinion!
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  • Profile picture of the author Micah Medina
    My only issue with this system (and I have seen it a few places online) is that it's another thing you've got to check on. You also risk creating negative social proof when your product launches and there aren't any reviews.

    There are obvious ways around this, though.
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  • Profile picture of the author JBagnas
    I can relate with this 100%, reviews are the future if not already. Great post.
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  • Profile picture of the author thehorizon
    I like that. Makes me wonder if there are other kinds of similar words like this that we've been using to turn prospects off. Words are socially conditioned to evoke a certain emotion. Even in hypnosis, there are certain "key words" that mean different things to different individuals.

    Baby is more emotionally charged than infant.
    Great is more casual than excellent.
    Sizzling is more action-packed than burning.

    Guarantee? Warranty? Moneyback? No risk?
    Bonuses? Gifts?
    Price? Cost? For only?
    Solution? Fix? Realignment?
    Easy? Simple? Straightforward?

    Kind of curious if any of those produce results. Maybe it's time to start testing...

    I used to bother a little about SEO... it's just a little hindering to the art of writing sales letters, isn't it? Since the order and choice of words really impacts conversions...
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    • Profile picture of the author DougBarger
      Yes sir. I had a similar conversation with a client yesterday.

      Sometimes you can use the word "get" instead of receive and it seems
      to be your more active voice rather than receive which can sound more passive. Know what I mean?

      Short, punchy active verbs work for you more than their superfluous counterparts don't they?

      I'd like to hear some examples of words you use Rick over other ones because you've found them to convert higher than the others.

      Feel up to share?
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    • Profile picture of the author abugah
      Originally Posted by thehorizon View Post

      I like that. Makes me wonder if there are other kinds of similar words like this that we've been using to turn prospects off. Words are socially conditioned to evoke a certain emotion. Even in hypnosis, there are certain "key words" that mean different things to different individuals.

      Baby is more emotionally charged than infant.
      Great is more casual than excellent.
      Sizzling is more action-packed than burning.

      Guarantee? Warranty? Moneyback? No risk?
      Bonuses? Gifts?
      Price? Cost? For only?
      Solution? Fix? Realignment?
      Easy? Simple? Straightforward?

      Kind of curious if any of those produce results. Maybe it's time to start testing...

      I used to bother a little about SEO... it's just a little hindering to the art of writing sales letters, isn't it? Since the order and choice of words really impacts conversions...
      I have no specific prove, but I think people are getting wary of screenshots of outrageous earnings.

      Most people think they fake.
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  • Profile picture of the author abugah
    Thank you for that. That's probably what Eugene Schwartz had in mind when he talked about sophistication of the market. When a phrase, claim, product or word becomes common place you need to give it a new twist. For sure every other sales letter has testimonials. And I think consumers have reached a point they suspect, they are either fake or are given by friends.
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  • Profile picture of the author maximus242
    I think this all comes back to getting into your customers shoes
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  • Profile picture of the author annabelle07
    This is really interesting. Didn't think it would make such a big difference - need to test it out too. To tell you the truth, I never gave it much thought because I'm usually quite trusting when it comes to testimonials - especially when they're given by people with great credentials.
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    • I've never used the word "Testimonial" - only because I've always felt it sounded very official. And jarred the flow of the sales piece.

      And thinking about it I've never used "Review" either.

      Based on what you've all said now I will.

      What I usually say is "Here's what others are saying"

      I sometimes extend it "Here's what others are saying about the (name the key benefits) and (name the product or service)"

      Steve
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