What is Your Alpha Message? Headline Writing 101!

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When you're plotting out a sales letter, you have to communicate your offer with unquestionable clarity in your most consequential message (a.k.a. the headline)...

...Chock full of emotional triggers & benefits!

I call this the ALPHA MESSAGE.

In the absence of your headline instigating a DEEP curiosity about your offer, you're ability to sell is severely hampered...

...And all the wonderful copy you have in the heart of the sales letter will hardly ever be read.

Why do I call it the ALPHA MESSAGE?

Well...

I was reading the Dog Whisperer book by Cesar Millan once upon a time...

...And he talks about being a pack leader.

Your copy has to establish that you're the pack leader of BOTH your market and the audience reading your pitch.

If you fail to assert your leadership in the opening headline (and pre-headline copy), you just flushed your time and investment down the toilet.

So here's what you need to do:
  1. On a piece of paper or a blank Word doc. file, write the most mind-blowing benefits your product or services provides.
  2. Write down the emotions that you imagine your prospects would FEEL if these benefits came to life.
  3. Create 10 headlines that blend together these benefits & emotions in a direct call-to-action (so they read your copy.)
Key point: Keep writing TOTALLY DIFFERENT headlines until you feel you've really captured the core essence of what you want to communicate...

...so your pack leader credibility is heightened as much as your ability-to-write can create!

There's your work.

Cheers!

Mark

P.S. A pack leader is ALWAYS calm. Anything less is considered instability within the pack (a.k.a. your target audience) and they won't take you sincerely. What does that mean in terms of copy? Don't go over-the-top. You don't need to aspire for a headline that tells a cheesy story. Be real. Genuine headlines sell.

P.P.S. The essence of persuasion is confidence. And the key to confidence is knowing what the hell you're talking about! Your headline demonstrates your knowledge, emotional insights/awareness and the ability to LEAD your audience to the conclusion you want them to BELIEVE or accept as TRUTH.
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  • Profile picture of the author ASCW
    Good stuff man, a few questions though.

    How do you reconcile the following two points?
    1. On a piece of paper or a blank Word doc. file, write the most mind-blowing benefits your product or services provides. Write down the emotions that you imagine your prospects would FEEL if these benefits came to life.

    2. A pack leader is ALWAYS calm. Anything less is considered instability within the pack (a.k.a. your target audience) and they won't take you sincerely. What does that mean in terms of copy? Don't go over-the-top. You don't need to aspire for a headline that tells a cheesy story. Be real. Genuine headlines sell.

    I feel like balancing these two is a careful art. I know my headlines tend to lean more towards being calm, and genuine.

    I think it's way too easy to go over the top with hyperbole in your headline. And depending on the market - the whole game feels like a screaming match.

    Which is where I like to dial it back, and tone it down a bit - and stand out by contrast. Focus on being calm, and clear - Like a real person who's just trying to have a one-on-one chat. While putting up a strong and relevant message to my target audience.

    But I'd like to see what you do. Do you have any examples of headlines with mind-blowing benefits, while remaining calm and genuine?

    -Andy

    P.S. Stephen Dean really nails what I'm trying to say here: Copy Productions - Stephen Dean
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    • Profile picture of the author ewenmack
      It's a tipping point Gary Bencivenga, Doug DAnna and Clayton Makepeace use and teach.

      Bob Bly now uses a pre headline for selling his training by using the number of books written,
      or a quote from a book publisher.

      He learnt it from Clayton.

      Best,
      Ewen
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    • Profile picture of the author Steve Hill
      Originally Posted by ASCW View Post


      P.S. Stephen Dean really nails what I'm trying to say here: Copy Productions - Stephen Dean
      The Stephen Dean commentary was a good example of being calm, direct, and right to the point of what the prospect really wants to know. It reminds me of some of the best classic headlines:

      The prospect asks himself...

      How Can I Retire At 50 On My Current Income?

      The faux copywriter writes this headline for the prospect...

      Attention! You Are About To Discover How You Can Unleash A Flood Of Interest-Generating Cash In To Your Bank Account So You Can Retire Young And Never Worry About Money Again!

      The pro copywriter writes this headline for the prospect...

      How To Retire At 50 On Your Current Income.
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