Could you please critique my first sales letter?
I've just written my first full-blown sales letter, and I'm ready to start
the editing phase.
The only problem is I can't be objective about it.
On a scale of 1 to ten, I'd say my skills are at about 2. Just so you know what skill level you're talking to.
The product is a couple of small addons to Mike Filsaime's butterfly script.
A problem I ran into is making the reader want the script in the first place, it's not a very popular script and many people don't even know it exists.
So I had do educate the reader what the butterfly script could do for them before I started talking about my product.
Right off the bat I know I have to do a recap of what the customer gets, and I have to add a lot of emotion to it. It's dryer than my grandpa's bald scalp.
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Also, I'm not good at moving from one subject to another very well.
Any advice and feedback would be greatly appreciated. Just remember, I'm NOT a writer and nowhere near the skill level you guys are.
Thanks,
David Maschke
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