Writing an Amazon description for a friend...

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Hey Warriors,

I've seen a lot of helpful critiquing on this forum, and would love to get a little perspective on something I've been writing for a friend.

It's just the title and Amazon.com description of a free Kindle ebook.

Notes:
  • The description has to be one solid paragraph if you want all the text to appear on the Amazon page (so readers don't have to click "read more")
  • The description has to appeal to social media lovers because they're the ones who are interested in reading social media books. If they like the book, they will share it with the skeptics in their life, so the description also has to avoid turning off the skeptics.


Fourscore And Twitter Years Ago
How Social Media And The History Of Business
Form A Potent Combination


Book Description:
Sixty percent of small to mid-sized businesses do not plan to use social media in their 2012 marketing efforts, most citing that they don't understand the value in it. But before you go fumbling around and send them links to the thousands of case studies that "prove" social media works, remember this: Everyone used to call email outdated until the day Groupon gained wild success by using email. Businesspeople ignore statistics and case studies until they actually "see" the value of the thing they are criticizing. Fourscore And Twitter Years Ago is a quick, thirty minute read that paints the picture of social media's deepest benefits. The author Whitney Rose says, "Businesses shouldn't have to wait another three or more years for a large company to demonstrate that social media is valid (the same way that Groupon demonstrated email was valid). I can prove it is valid now in under 30 minutes using no examples, giving no tips, and using no established research. All I have to do is take a skeptic, insert a gut feeling about what social media is into his stomach, and watch his frown turn into a smirk." She lists eleven main problems that social media solves...business problems that have existed for hundreds of years...business problems that any CEO would be glad to get rid of, even if it means they have to sign up for a Twitter account. The book is free. It's for anyone from the CEO of a company to the accountant down the hall who visibly rolls his eyes every time someone in the office says "Twitter." Please note: It contains no how-to tips on Facebook, Twitter, or any other platform.


Thanks for helping out,
Caleb


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  • Profile picture of the author jtunkelo
    Fourscore...? Foursquare?
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    • Profile picture of the author CabTenson
      Originally Posted by jtunkelo View Post

      Fourscore...? Foursquare?
      Fourscore, like in the Gettysburg Address (although it may have been "Four score" with a space).

      Good to know that might confuse.
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  • Profile picture of the author JerryKuzma
    Just on the title first: Your title is your headline on amazon. You need a new title.

    With me being an American living in the UK the past 21 years, I learned the hard way that--to be blunt--there is a very big world beyond the US borders. We often think that the world is American.....I had to be set free from 'americanitis' myself...

    Not many of your potential GLOBAL amazon viewers will recognize anything that is obscure and very american. So within ten seconds, you have lost most of your viewers' interest.

    Better to lead with the guts of the book in the title. try this:

    Twitter Tactics: 11 Business Headaches that Social Media Can Cure

    (Hey, I like that one....can I steal it from myself??)

    Also, here is an amazon tactic that I do NOT see anyone else using: Since it is free to upload to kindle, why not put up two titles and descriptions in order to split-test? Track your results and delete the slower selling title.

    You are welcome to subscribe for more self-publishing tips. Hope that helps...

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    • Profile picture of the author CabTenson
      Originally Posted by JerryKuzma View Post

      Just on the title first: Your title is your headline on amazon. You need a new title.

      With me being an American living in the UK the past 21 years, I learned the hard way that--to be blunt--there is a very big world beyond the US borders. We often think that the world is American.....I had to be set free from 'americanitis' myself...

      Not many of your potential GLOBAL amazon viewers will recognize anything that is obscure and very american. So within ten seconds, you have lost most of your viewers' interest.

      Better to lead with the guts of the book in the title. try this:

      Twitter Tactics: 11 Business Headaches that Social Media Can Cure
      That is very helpful. Thank you.

      Originally Posted by JerryKuzma View Post

      btw, why is it free? Is it being used for lead gen? If it is that good, charge 2.99 for it....your target market should be willing to pay 2.99 with no problem....
      You think a short, 30 minute read (that's essentially just an argument) is something people would pay for? It does solve a problem, certainly, but I assume when something's free its easier to share and go viral. The author is relying on social media people to share it.

      It is not lead gen for an EXISTING product, so charging for it might be easier, though. That's definitely something to consider.
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    btw, why is it free? Is it being used for lead gen? If it is that good, charge 2.99 for it....your target market should be willing to pay 2.99 with no problem....


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