Ewen/Collette -- Is This Better?
I've followed your advice of selecting a target audience from our previous discussion about a month ago: http://www.warriorforum.com/copywrit...ales-page.html
I selected college students.
I think the reason I avoided doing this last year was because writing to this audience (18-22) made me feel old (I'm 26).
Anyway, I've taken your advice, and revised this sales page from the feedback I got here: http://www.warriorforum.com/copywrit...es-letter.html
Here are the respective sales copies:
Sales Copy 3/31/2012
Sales Copy 4/23/2012
I've worked on trying to improve my last sales copy during last week and over the weekend. This is what I have so far as of today 4/30/2012: How To Focus Better
Can either of you guys take a look at it when you have time and let me know what you think of it this time?
And, if anyone else would like to provide feedback, I would appreciate it too.
Thank you.
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