Looking for some input about my website :)

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I recently just launched a website to help people build their social credibility on facebook. Basically it is a website that helps exposure and increase facebook fans and likes to a fan page.
however i am not having luck with people converting and purchasing. Can some of you take a look and tell me how the site looks? I is ascetically pleasing to the eye? Are the packages attractive (in particular the graphics and pricing?)

Anything else at all with tips please feel free to tell

The domain is in the signature. The page in particular that i want input on is the domainname . com/packages/
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  • Profile picture of the author kylenelson24
    I think the graphics on the packages page looks great and the prices seem very reasonable. The layout is very clean and eye appealing. The only thing i would change is on the packages page you should make it so it is more spread out and not to compacted. Give the section between packages and monthly packages some room. Maybe set up it vertically instead of horizontally?

    Looks good though
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  • Profile picture of the author travlinguy
    Come up with a benefit-oriented headline. Put the How It Works message up front, not down below in microscopic print. And make the explanation simple and big. I'm not a big fan of video but this site sure could use an explanation up front and quick because just looking at it quickly, people aren't going to have a clue as to what you're offering. Good luck.
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    • Profile picture of the author NewFacebookLikes
      Thanks for the input. I really like the idea of a video. I would like to do a video in this style: vimeo .com /35931459 but i am not sure on who to go to to get one done. any pointers in who to talk too?
      Originally Posted by travlinguy View Post

      Come up with a benefit-oriented headline. Put the How It Works message up front, not down below in microscopic print. And make the explanation simple and big. I'm not a big fan of video but this site sure could use an explanation up front and quick because just looking at it quickly, people aren't going to have a clue as to what you're offering. Good luck.
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  • Profile picture of the author Mark Andrews
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    What are Facebook Likes going to do for me?

    All I'm looking at is a bunch of order boxes at the top of the page.

    One small paragraph on the left containing not one single benefit and a couple more tiny paragraphs on the right saying diddly fat squat except buy this now.

    Why should I?

    You can't just put a load of buy-it-now boxes on a page with some pretty colors and expect everyone to instantly purchase without knowing at all what's in it for them.

    So what if people don't like me? Should I give a flying fig? Truth is I couldn't care less. Why on earth would I want to buy Likes from perfect strangers I've never met and probably never will?

    What good are Likes to me? You need to at least answer this question.

    Truth be told... there's more fun to be gained looking at a one armed bandit than this web page. And I'm not even a gambler.

    What is there to critique? There's hardly anything here. About as dry as a bone. Bereft of anything to direct me into taking a direct course of action.

    Same goes for you as the other guy I just critiqued...

    What's in it for me?

    Why should I be interested?

    How will this benefit me?

    What advantage do I gain, what value do I gain from buying random Likes on Facebook?

    Give me a good reason or 10 why I should be interested.

    A video would probably be better for you to explain and/or to convey these benefits (if there are any).


    Mark Andrews
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    • Profile picture of the author CallOfTheMild
      Originally Posted by Mark Andrews View Post

      What are Facebook Likes going to do for me?

      All I'm looking at is a bunch of order boxes at the top of the page.

      One small paragraph on the left containing not one single benefit and a couple more tiny paragraphs on the right saying diddly fat squat except buy this now.

      Why should I?

      You can't just put a load of buy-it-now boxes on a page with some pretty colors and expect everyone to instantly purchase without knowing at all what's in it for them.

      So what if people don't like me? Should I give a flying fig? Truth is I couldn't care less. Why on earth would I want to buy Likes from perfect strangers I've never met and probably never will?

      What good are Likes to me? You need to at least answer this question.

      Truth be told... there's more fun to be gained looking at a one armed bandit than this web page. And I'm not even a gambler.

      What is there to critique? There's hardly anything here. About as dry as a bone. Bereft of anything to direct me into taking a direct course of action.

      Same goes for you as the other guy I just critiqued...

      What's in it for me?

      Why should I be interested?

      How will this benefit me?

      What advantage do I gain, what value do I gain from buying random Likes on Facebook?

      Give me a good reason or 10 why I should be interested.

      A video would probably be better for you to explain and/or to convey these benefits (if there are any).


      Mark Andrews
      I'm late to the party but I agree with every last word said above.

      I looked at the site. It looks fantastic but...why would I want it? Why do I care about a bunch of strangers liking my page? Why should I give you $59 to add a bunch of likes to my page...what does this do for me? I understand that a crowd draws a crowd but having a bunch of likes doesn't necessarily equate more, quality followers...so what's in it for me?

      Explain that, I'd be more apt to stay on your site and think about it.
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  • Profile picture of the author NewFacebookLikes
    Mark,

    Thanks for the critique. I will for sure take all of this in to consideration and go back to my web designer and graphic designer and see what they can do. In addition i will make a list of benefits and interests. I would like to make a video format but i am not sure who to go to.
    Do you know of any websites out there that makes videos.

    I appreciate the help mark!
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    • Profile picture of the author Mark Andrews
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      For the video script employ a pro copywriter. Not me, I don't know a thing about Facebook. Don't have an account there, the place doesn't interest me in the absolute slightest. It's not something I can raise even an inkling of excitement about.

      JWPlayer would be a good platform to use for the video. Embed this close to the top of your page underneath your main headline. And it's features and benefits you need to focus on not benefits and interests.

      For the voice-over, I would personally recommend NaplesDave - View Profile: naplesdave

      Warmest regards,


      Mark Andrews
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  • Profile picture of the author ArayInc
    WOW, Mark Andrews that was a great critique! Seriously.....I'm yet another newbie, I would really appreciate if you (and anyone else) would critique my sites (s). Im so tired of my fam and friends just saying "yeah, it's great"....=)

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    ydessentials (.com)

    Thank you in advance! =)
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  • Profile picture of the author shawnlebrun
    the biggest issue i see with this site is, I don't see anything
    at the top of the page that would hook me and bring me into
    the page.

    think of a newspaper, people scan through the newspapers
    looking at headlines and trying to find stuff that appeals
    to them or catches their interest.

    so, at the top of your site, you should have some sort of
    a headline that speaks directly to your target market and
    catches their attention... and more importantly, brings
    them into the copy.

    your headline should answer WHY someone should
    even care about getting facebook likes

    so, right at the top, i'd have a really big and specific promise/
    benefit you can offer your target market. speak only to them...
    you only want to stop them and appeal to their motivations.

    but most of all, you really have to hammer home WHY someone
    even needs facebook likes, and draw a straight line to what that
    will mean for them, in end-result benefits (more eyeballs, more sales)
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    • Profile picture of the author NewFacebookLikes
      Thanks for the great feedback. I would have to agree. I think i need to really have a benefit section on why someone wants more facebook likes. I like the comparison to a newspaper that really helped to put it into view.

      So are you meaning something like:
      NewFacebookLikes.com
      Your #1 Supplier of New Facebook Fans
      or
      Exposing your Facebook Fan Page to the masses
      or
      Exposing you to new leads and potential customers?
      or
      More Fans = More Sales
      (is that too pushy or can it ever be too pushy?)

      Those are just ideas. Im just not sure what is eye catching for a sub heading to really hook the customer in. Any ideas for subheadings? I think I am going to also try to do a benefit page above the packages or on the home page maybe really hammer down on why anyone needs facebook fans.
      I would really like to get a video, i feel it is more eye appealing and would get mroe attention maybe?
      Thanks!


      Originally Posted by shawnlebrun View Post

      the biggest issue i see with this site is, I don't see anything
      at the top of the page that would hook me and bring me into
      the page.

      think of a newspaper, people scan through the newspapers
      looking at headlines and trying to find stuff that appeals
      to them or catches their interest.

      so, at the top of your site, you should have some sort of
      a headline that speaks directly to your target market and
      catches their attention... and more importantly, brings
      them into the copy.

      your headline should answer WHY someone should
      even care about getting facebook likes

      so, right at the top, i'd have a really big and specific promise/
      benefit you can offer your target market. speak only to them...
      you only want to stop them and appeal to their motivations.

      but most of all, you really have to hammer home WHY someone
      even needs facebook likes, and draw a straight line to what that
      will mean for them, in end-result benefits (more eyeballs, more sales)
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  • Lots of great suggestions so far. My comment is to make it simpler. Drop-dead simple.

    Look at this:
    Email Marketing and Email List Manager | MailChimp
    Clear. Easy to understand.

    This is a little more cluttered but gets to the point:
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    Or check out how clean 37 signals is:
    37signals: Web-based collaboration apps for small business
    "Frustration-free web-based apps for collaboration, sharing information, and making decisions."

    Or Success Chef:
    http://successchef.com/
    "Questions About Online Business. Answered."

    Simplify.
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    • Profile picture of the author NewFacebookLikes
      Thanks for going the extra mile and finding websites for examples. It really helped to visualize a good converting page.
      Need to simplify the page so maybe something like:

      NewFacebookLikes.com
      Taking the hassle out of marketing on Facebook and delivering new fans to your page

      How does that sound? I am trying to think of a good sub header under the logo.

      Originally Posted by Joe Ditzel View Post

      Lots of great suggestions so far. My comment is to make it simpler. Drop-dead simple.

      Look at this:
      Email Marketing and Email List Manager | MailChimp
      Clear. Easy to understand.

      This is a little more cluttered but gets to the point:
      Junk Removal | Hauling 1-800-GOT-JUNK? Trash Waste Garbage Rubbish Removal

      Or check out how clean 37 signals is:
      37signals: Web-based collaboration apps for small business
      "Frustration-free web-based apps for collaboration, sharing information, and making decisions."

      Or Success Chef:
      Build Online Businesses in Four Simple Steps With Success Chef
      "Questions About Online Business. Answered."

      Simplify.
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  • Profile picture of the author Don Grace
    hey man,

    Mark is spot on and I'll add my two cents... DO NOT ever let a web designer have free reign over your site. They don't know doodley squat about conversion. Less is more in my experience when it comes to graphics, and you definitely have too many.

    That one big one to the right up top does nothing to make me read on, in fact I have no idea what it's purpose is.

    My eyes have no idea what to do when I hit the page, and you only have 2 seconds to capture my attention (same as your market) to make me read further because we all have the attention span of a three bean salad.

    Draw them in with a headline, and remember the purpose of each sentence after that is to only make them read the next sentence. After that, it's all about the close "buy my s**t now

    If you go VSL, a tactic I like to use is an exit pop-- if they try to click away then take them to the written version. Has worked quite well for me. If you want to see a good example check out anything from stansbury research.

    take care,

    don
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  • Profile picture of the author StewartJ
    It looks good however, the call to actions are not very prominent. I would focus on listing a strong call to action next to the benefits/features.
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  • Profile picture of the author NewFacebookLikes
    Thanks for the input everyone. We are going to start with a video then progress from there.
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  • Profile picture of the author alfid
    I agree with most of the replies I've seen above. The other issue is, you should really make sure the service you are providing is within Facebook's guidelines. After all, people can get FB fans for free.
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    • Profile picture of the author kylenelson24
      Im pretty sure it is not against the guidelines. There are many of these services. Plus Facebook has no clue how you are getting your likes, only the number and the frequency right?

      Originally Posted by alfid View Post

      I agree with most of the replies I've seen above. The other issue is, you should really make sure the service you are providing is within Facebook's guidelines. After all, people can get FB fans for free.
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  • Profile picture of the author The Biz Guy
    The site looks awesome. Unfortunately most people rather buy fb fans in fiverr.
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  • Profile picture of the author SocialDemon
    your page is awesome. But I would recommend to use just one video describing how you are actually helping people to promote their business using facebook likes, fans etc. Also dont hesitate to create a good video by investing good amount behind the video creator. A good video will pay back you by its won merit. Hope that helps.
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  • Profile picture of the author BrentDotCom
    I will agree that simpler is almost always better. People like to be told what to do in a way that doesn't make em think too much. Seems you your industry is getting to be a crowded one.
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  • Profile picture of the author shayman
    Site looks nice...not sure about this line "Immediate results in as few as 5 days". Surely something is either 'Immediate' or is in '5 days'? That's how I read it anyway .
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    • Profile picture of the author NewFacebookLikes
      Good point. Didn't really think that one through but i will for sure take it into some consideration!

      Originally Posted by shayman View Post

      Site looks nice...not sure about this line "Immediate results in as few as 5 days". Surely something is either 'Immediate' or is in '5 days'? That's how I read it anyway .
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  • Profile picture of the author Saluki Guy
    I recommend Tom Sye aka voiceoffive from Fiverr.com to do the voice over.

    Here's my page Philadelphia Orthopedic Surgeons

    He did an awesome job on the voiceover. Cost me $5!!
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  • Profile picture of the author NewFacebookLikes
    A video has been made for the webpage. Check it out and tell me what you think.
    Yes we know that the video has black bars on each side. It has to do with the video format and the slider option we have for this theme so we are working on it but tell us what you think
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    • Profile picture of the author kgbrooklyn
      Hey dude, your website looks amazing! It looks so clean and legit. I don't think you have to worry about explaining to people what it is. I don't know how people are finding it, but if the ppc ad says get more facebook likes, then its very obvious what you are offering...

      After checking it out, I want to give it a try. But I couldn't find anything on your site about how it actually works. Are the likes real? Are they from bots? Is there a guarantee they won't unlike? Can you share or like specific posts, uploads, shares, or images? Can you like a page that is not on facebook, but uses a social media plugin?

      You should address these questions somewhere on the site.
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  • Profile picture of the author WarGasm
    I like it. Its simple not too many distractions but still looks very professional and the layout is good.

    The only thing I would change, is instead of having the paypal and guarantee seals on the side bar, I'd use that space for client testimonies instead. Three or four should do it and if you can have pictures of them next to their names it'd be even better. I also think having their full name and location would seem a lot more legit than just a first name.
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  • Profile picture of the author RodneyIvanJohnson
    I think your site has lots of potential. The one thing that sprung to mind instantly was the voice over in the video. I thinks the narrator needs to sound much more excited about the product. Also ask yourself Why would people want your product if they can get similar on fiverr for five bucks? . Dont get me wrong... If you can make that clear to yourself and to your prospects you've got a business.
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  • Profile picture of the author TheWrightWords
    Totally unrelated to your text or video, but I'd pump up your own social media following -- I popped over to Twitter to check (via your Twitter button) and you only have 17 followers.
    I don't usually care how many followers someone has, but if you are touting yourself as a social media expert, which in effect you are by offering the service, I'd work on increasing those figures. People will check -- even though you are not marketing FB not twitter, your Klout score is something I'd check before buying. Your KyleNelson24 twitter account has more Klout (44 as of today), I'd link to that instead for more credibility
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  • Profile picture of the author freeadstime
    Add a live chat to your site and start talking to the visitors. It may not be easy but you will convert a lot of visitors to buyers.
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    • Profile picture of the author IMNomad
      In a purely aesthetic sense, the chart and bullets directly below the video could use some "punch up".

      I purposely didn't read the site and just looked for eye-appeal.

      Tips:
      The blue charcoal style font wasn't strong enough, maybe it could be a bit bolder or bigger.

      The "With Us" / "Before Us" on the chart are the same color as the 5 bullet points to their left, which also doesn't make them stand out enough. Make "with us/before us" another color, maybe red. I am also very partial to really laying it out for the reader, how about changing the arrows to something like this.

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  • Profile picture of the author WinstonTian
    1. Autoplay your video. Extra actions lead to inaction in
    your visitors.

    2. Change "Stay ahead of social media" to something else.
    The headline doesn't even make sense. How do you stay
    ahead in social media? How do you define it?

    Followers? Fans? Opt-ins? Referral traffic? Friends? Activity
    in your Timeline?

    Change the whole headline into something actionable and
    tangible... Something that already triggers a tangible result.

    All the bullets need reworking as well.

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  • Profile picture of the author DNAWRealm
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    Include the link again and I'll help
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    I like the way you show realistic amounts...
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