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Quick Q re: opt in copy - need synonym for "no risk"

by Steve Foulds
3 replies
I'm writing some sales copy for a fitness company, their demographic target on the opt-in page may be nervous and intimidated by initial face to face meetings, I need some words that basically say "relax, its just a phone call, we're here to help".

Here's what I have so far:

"For a FREE informal phone consultation to plan the transformation of your body in the next 12 weeks, GUARANTEED, fill out your details below and one of our freindly body transformation experts will call you back in the next 24 hours" (Too wordy?)
#copy #no risk #opt #quick #synonym
  • Profile picture of the author shawnlebrun
    Hey Steve,

    I've written hundreds of letters for fitness trainers,
    and I usually try to include something like this... feel
    free to use it or something like it...

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    Look, our only job here is to help you get the body you want.

    So just pick up the phone and give us a call at the number listed.

    We'll chat for a few minutes in a relaxed environment and we'll
    show you exactly how we can help you get the results you want.

    After all, we want you to feel completely at home.

    We don't believe in hard-selling, we just want you to
    feel comfortable with what we can do for you.

    During our chat, I'll ask a few questions so I can
    see if we're a good fit and that we can honestly help.

    So if you prefer more of a laid-back atmosphere
    and not the "hard sell approach" that many of the
    big fitness chains use, give us a call right now at the
    number below.

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  • Profile picture of the author Thomas Michal
    I think it's too wordy but just my $0.02 thats not my niche so take it with a grain of salt.

    You could try:

    Learn how you can get the body you dream about in 12 weeks GUARANTEED!

    - 100% FREE

    - No cost or obligation

    Fill In The Detail below and we will contact you immediately

    P.s. We promise no hard sells, we hate those guys too. We are here to help
    Or just try "relax, its just a phone call, we're here to help".
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  • Profile picture of the author Steve Foulds
    Thanks Warriors!
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