Advice Needed: Does This Squeeze Page Hit the Right Emotional Buttons?
I created a story-based presell page. My goal is to capture the email addresses of my readers. But I want to connect with them first. Tell them about my struggle. Explain the "turning point" that changed things for me. And create desire to get them to opt-in to my email list.
The presell is true and based on my own experiences.
My Target Market: 30+ year old fathers with young kids and a wife. These guys have full-time jobs and drive one hour to and from work everyday. They used to be fit back in high school, former athletes (football, track, basketball, martial arts, etc.) but life has gotten busy and they've gotten a little over weight.
Or worse. They are "skinny fat". Neither fat, nor well-defined. And because of this they feel less masculine. They want to get their body back but don't have hours to waste at the gym.
What They Want: They want their bodies back. They want to feel masculine. They want to get attention from their wife, coworkers, etc. They want to do this from home, without spending time at the gym or lots of money on fitness equipment.
They want simple fitness hacks, geared towards guys, that they can follow a few times a week to get lean, muscular, and "ripped".
Based on that, I created the following squeeze page:
www.ExerciseRoutinesBlog.com/myjourney
What emotional triggers could I add to further speak to my market? Can I change my headline? Should I reword my paragraph headings? Should I be more descriptive with my story? Am I being too verbose?
Thanks in advance!
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