10 Ways To Begin An Internet Sales Letter

by Raydal
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The first sentence of an internet sales letter is like a hook. It
must grab the reader's attention and lead them into reading the
entire letter.

According to copywriter Joseph Sugarman, the purpose of the first
sentence of a sale letter is to get the reader to read the next
sentence. And the second sentence? To get the reader to read the
third sentence.

This becomes even more crucial on the internet than in print,
since attention spans are very short online.

There are certain types of letter openings that prove very
effective in pulling the prospect into the rest of the copy.
We'll briefly look at the ten most effective ways.

1. Tell a Story

Stories have been used for ages to relate lessons. From bedtime
stories to the greatest philosophers, we all love a good story.

A story creates empathy with the reader and helps to draw him
into the sales pitch. This works best if the story identifies
with the problem that the prospect is now experiencing for which
you've found the solution. Some of the most effective direct
mail pieces used this technique.

2. State the offer upfront

If your product or service is well known to your audience and
doesn't need any special introduction, then you can just state
the offer right away. This serves best if your offer is a very
attractive one. In this case the real appeal is in the offer
itself.

A common example is if you have a free offer or deep discount on
products your target audience is already interested in. Your
entire sales letter can then be based on the offer and not on the
product features or benefits.

3. Use a startling quote or statistic

This type of opening is really intended to get the reader to sit
up and pay attention. It should be 'newsy' and have some
'shock value'. It should raise a question in the prospect's
mind and build some curiosity to read the rest of the letter.

4. Make an announcement

This will work best if you have a new product that you are
introducing to the market. This should sound like a press
release. In other words, there should be little 'hype' and more
factual type statements emphasizing what's new about this
product.

5. Ask a question

Questions are very effective in pulling the reader into your
sales letter. This is especially true when the answers to the
questions are very important to the reader. These questions also
force the prospect to think and get involved with your copy. The
questions remain unresolved until you answer them in the copy.
Questions also make the letter sound conversational and more
personal.

6. Write to the reader as a colleague

If your target audience consists of a narrow special interest
group then you can address the reader as such. You may address
the reader as "Business Owner", or "Webmaster".

Right away this qualifies the prospect and saves them having to
read further to know if the letter is of interest to them. It
also serves another purpose: to make the reader feel as part of a
special group-a type of flattery.

7. Offer a free report

This will work best with higher ticket items. In this case you
want the prospects to send for the "special report" that will
further sell them on your product or service. The report must not
be pitched as a salesletter but as providing genuine information
that the reader can benefit from

8. Pinpoint the reader's problem

Most products or services provide a solution to a problem. You
can therefore start the letter by stating the problem that your
product solves. This will immediately qualify the reader and
provide a logical transition for the letter in explaining how the
product solves the problem in the next section.

9. State your strongest benefit

If your strongest benefit has a real striking appeal to your
prospect then you may start by stating this benefit upfront. This
benefit must reach out to the reader's self-interest and go
beyond just addressing a feature of your product. Copywriters
commonly refer to this as selling the sizzle and not the steak.
Just think about it, if your strongest value you are offering the
reader doesn't capture his interest then the others will fail
also.

10. Offer some 'secret', privileged information

You can make an offer that is not open to the 'general public'
but only to a select few. This will work well with your present
customer base who may receive this announcement ahead of other
people. The point here is that the reader feels special because
they are getting the 'inside deal'. This will also work well
with any select group such as new subscribers, repeat buyers or
any group you care to 'invent'.

This list is not exhaustive but shows those techniques that I
find most effective as I create salescopy for my online clients.
If you fail to grab the reader's attention in those precious few
opening seconds then the entire battle is lost. The majority of
online readers simply scan before they choose to read the entire
letter. If the start of the letter doesn't capture their
attention then they are lost for good (or 'bad' really).

Sometimes the conversion rate for a website can be drastically
increased by just changing the opening paragraph for the copy.
Use anyone of these ten techniques to boost your online sales.

-Ray Edwards
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  • Profile picture of the author Phalanx
    Fantastic tips Ray, bookmarked.

    You already got ideas running through my mind about a squeeze page I've written!
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    • Profile picture of the author Raydal
      Originally Posted by Phalanx View Post

      Fantastic tips Ray, bookmarked.

      You already got ideas running through my mind about a squeeze page I've written!

      Glad that you found some value in the post. Most people would start
      writing a sales letter using the same formula over and over again. The
      way you start the letter has a lot to do with the relationship of your
      prospects to the product you are offering--whether they are likely
      to agree or disagree with your position.

      That is just one factor, but the details of WHICH opening to use
      for WHICH market is for another post.

      -Ray Edwards
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      • Profile picture of the author BizBooks
        Thank you Ray! Another phenomenal post!

        Nice welcome video there on your site.
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        • Profile picture of the author Raydal
          Originally Posted by BizBooks View Post

          Thank you Ray! Another phenomenal post!

          Nice welcome video there on your site.
          Thanks for commenting on the video on my site. I'm testing
          that right now. I had an audio message saying basically
          the same thing using a voice-over artist. I want to see if I can
          beat him.

          -Ray Edwards
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  • Profile picture of the author BizBooks
    When I saw the URL I knew it was a split test
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  • Profile picture of the author Adaptive
    Ray, sorry I didn't comment on this one earlier: thank you for a superb compilation of starting points that end "blank page worry."

    Regards,
    Allen
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  • Profile picture of the author Sarah Johnson
    Thanks for the ideas Ray.

    I like number 3. Using a startling quote or statistic or even a controversial statement. It really gets the reader thinking...one way or another you have them hooked.

    Even if they don't like the statement too much you can smooth that over within the copy.

    Always nice to read your tips.

    ~Sarah Johnson
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    • Profile picture of the author Steven Wagenheim
      Man, more people need to come to this forum and read some of this stuff.

      They might actually turn into copywriters some day.

      Thanks Ray...great stuff.

      I personally use 1 and 8 the most.

      Maybe I should try changing things up a bit and see what kind of results I
      get.

      Something to think about for my next sales letter.
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      • Profile picture of the author Raydal
        Originally Posted by Steven Wagenheim View Post

        Man, more people need to come to this forum and read some of this stuff.

        They might actually turn into copywriters some day.

        Thanks Ray...great stuff.

        I personally use 1 and 8 the most.

        Maybe I should try changing things up a bit and see what kind of results I
        get.

        Something to think about for my next sales letter.
        Steven, I agree!

        It's a pity that so much of marketing involves copywriting and
        copywriters get pushed to one corner of the forum. Everything
        comes down to copywriting.

        I get kicked out of the main forum anytime I mention the word
        'copywriting' in my posts. But maybe more people will start
        to venture beyond the main forum's borders.

        -Ray Edwards
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        • Profile picture of the author Janus
          Originally Posted by Raydal View Post


          It's a pity that so much of marketing involves copywriting and
          copywriters get pushed to one corner of the forum. Everything
          comes down to copywriting.

          I get kicked out of the main forum anytime I mention the word
          'copywriting' in my posts. But maybe more people will start
          to venture beyond the main forum's borders.

          -Ray Edwards
          Well I'm one who has ventured out. My site is a recently created B2B site that I'll try to improve over the weekend. No sales letter per se but I'm sure it can be signifcantly improved. Then on to becoming a marketing expert.

          Pat
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        • Profile picture of the author donhutchinson
          Originally Posted by Raydal View Post

          I get kicked out of the main forum anytime I mention the word
          'copywriting' in my posts. But maybe more people will start
          to venture beyond the main forum's borders.
          Hi Ray, I just ventured!

          Glad I did, excellent points in this post.
          Valuable, concise and complete.

          Thanks for your help,
          Don
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  • Profile picture of the author Janus
    Ray,

    Thanks for sharing. Isn't it amazing how simple writing is when you know what your doing.

    Pat
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    • Profile picture of the author Raydal
      Originally Posted by Janus View Post

      Ray,

      Thanks for sharing. Isn't it amazing how simple writing is when you know what your doing.

      Pat
      Writing does have its creative side but a lot of it is sheer discipline
      and following the rules. But you have to know them first--and break
      them a couple time too!

      -Ray Edwards
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