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Optinpage + 2 salespages for Splittesting

by Renate
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Hello Warriors,

I have worked hard to finally get my business online. Now everything depends on the marketing, means the splashpage and salespage. Never has something been so important to me.
Please, Warriors have a look at the 3 pages, the headlines and the content of the salespages. Since I could not make up my mind, which headlines and text to use, I made 2 salespages for splittesting. They only differ in the beginning.

http://webservice.dysak.biz

After subscription you would be led to one of these pages:

http://webservice.dysak.biz/index0.htm

http://webservice.dysak.biz/index1.htm

Thank you so much in advance for your honest critics and improvement proposals.

Kind regards
Renate Schedl
#optinpage #salespages #splittesting
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    Originally Posted by Renate View Post

    Hello Warriors,

    Please, Warriors have a look at the 3 pages, the headlines and the content of the salespages.
    http://webservice.dysak.biz

    After subscription you would be led to one of these pages:

    http://webservice.dysak.biz/index0.htm

    http://webservice.dysak.biz/index1.htm

    Thank you so much in advance for your honest critics and improvement proposals.

    Kind regards
    Renate Schedl
    I there anyone, who could give me some feedback? PLEASE!

    Renate
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    • Profile picture of the author Kyle Tully
      OK I only looked at the opt-in... I don't think anyone will get any further than that.

      What is "recognition value"? You haven't sold me on giving you my email address.
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      • Profile picture of the author zapseo
        Bingo, Kyle.

        While I read your comments before reading the opt-in -- I didn't have to worry about your comments slanting my opinion.

        The only thing ("benefit"), Renate, that you are promoting is "recognition value" -- and without having a clue as to what you mean by that -- I'm outta there.

        Don't bore or confuse your readers.

        It's very bad for business.
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        • Profile picture of the author Renate
          Originally Posted by zapseo View Post

          Bingo, Kyle.

          While I read your comments before reading the opt-in -- I didn't have to worry about your comments slanting my opinion.

          The only thing ("benefit"), Renate, that you are promoting is "recognition value" -- and without having a clue as to what you mean by that -- I'm outta there.

          Don't bore or confuse your readers.

          It's very bad for business.
          Thank you Kyle and Zapseo,

          well I fully agree with you, if "recognition value" is an unknown word (I looked it up in google translation) then of course nothing I wrote will work.
          What I mean is the German Word "Wiedererkennungswert". Perhaps there is somewhere a warrior who could translate this. Perhaps I can explain it:

          If you see a company's design again and again, then you will remember it. You will remember the colors, the logo, the service, the behaviour of the contactperson. And if you got a good impression you will read a page coming up with this corporate design again, because you were satisfied the last time.

          Perhaps you might read the salespage now???? You must not give me your email to read it.

          Thank you for your comments.
          Renate
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          • Profile picture of the author zapseo
            I think the term you might be looking for is "Branding".
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            • Profile picture of the author zapseo
              Renate,

              I don't know how you value your time vs money -- but you would do better to have this written by a native English speaker.

              Trying to understand what you mean is just too difficult.

              What you want in a sales letter has been called a "greased slide". You want the reader to not have any "speed bumps" (a term my friend John Ritz likes to use -- and I think it beautifully describes the concept) while reading the copy so they read straight thru to the buy button.

              What you want, in a sales letter, is to so totally engage the reader -- just like a good novel or a good movie -- you want to engage them so strongly that they will ignore interruptions in order to keep reading (in fact, the interruptions may not even register.)

              I'm not quite sure of all what you are offering, but my initial impression is that you are going to have trouble getting those prices for what you are offering. I could be mistaken.

              So, I hope this helps -- even though it's not specifically about the specific words you wrote.

              Good luck & Hope this Helps!

              Judy Kettenhofen, Profit Strategist/Copywriter
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