My First Copywrite! Need Help

Below is the content for my first letter which I would like to use either as an email or maybe just create a page on my site of people who want more information.

What do you WF Experts think? Be critical, I can take it! I was born to succeed!!

Thanks
Wes


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RE: Say Goodbye To Fat And Flab
From: Wesley Virgin, Personal Trainer
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