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Help me with a Front Page content for my Site.

by AttitudeBoy
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Hey guys,

Can you please help me out with a front page statement for people to be attracted to my site. Trust me It is not so attractive.

Site Brilliant Gig-Homework help, Online tutoring, Hire Social Media Followers, Post and Complete Microjobs.

Check out the front page and help me out with the content on the home page.

Thank you
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  • Profile picture of the author Mark Andrews
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    Originally Posted by AttitudeBoy View Post

    Hey guys,

    Can you please help me out with a front page statement for people to be attracted to my site. Trust me It is not so attractive.

    Site:

    Check out the front page and help me out with the content on the home page.

    Thank you
    Let me get this straight. You're not looking for a critique. Correct?

    You just want somebody, a copywriter here to write this for you free of charge?

    It might be Christmas but pass. You can take this attitude elsewhere.


    Mark Andrews
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    • Profile picture of the author AttitudeBoy
      Not really I am looking for a critique that can give me their opinion and expertise for the print page, seriously I am not that comfortable with my front page content. If it attracts the first time visitors or it needs some retouches and If yes then how can I make it better.
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  • Profile picture of the author bobtracz
    way to complex and busy... get some focus and let your visiter know immediately what is in it for him.
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  • Profile picture of the author PaulP51D
    I am NOT an expert copywriter - though I have read books on the subject. I agree with Bobtracz; the text is too small.

    IMHO, this being the interweb, you need to be establishing what the site is all about without expecting your visitors to get into the nitty-gritty of reading tight text. Coz, like you and me they will not hang around very long if they don't get the point of your site within a very few seconds.

    If it were me I would be visiting other sites that have similar offerings and look to see their designs. Here is a site that gets the point across immediately: Work from Home - Work at Home Online with Get Paid

    Notice how 'Get Paid' and 'Work From Home' are prominent. So, if that is something that is of interest to me I get the point immediately and can then decide if I want to read further.

    All the while you should be writing like a copywriter; attempting to sell people on the idea. And for that you need to read-up on the subject.

    Lastly, you have a typo in the sentence 'Employer who need people to accomplish a task?'

    Typos may seem like minor points, but they really are not - it relates to credibility.

    Paul
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  • Profile picture of the author wrcato2
    Your right it's not pretty. At least you know that much. You should probably hire a writer. check out Warriors for hire here on the forum. Or get a course on copy writing.
    Since you are live check out warriors for hire that will be my first stop.
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  • Profile picture of the author Corey Geer
    I would start by firing whoever designed the site in the first place. Tables and In-Line styling huh? Beautiful...

    Yeah.. your tagline is the least of your worries on that site. I'm scared to see how it loads up in the earlier versions of IE.
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