Not asking for a free critique - just some feedback!

It's so generic, bland and weak.

What's your USP?

Also I don't get the correlation between creating products fast and needing a coaching program to do that.

Are you going to teach them personally how to create products fast? Why would you want to do that?

From a design standpoint, you need some color. Your headline and the text at the bottom stand out, but they don't make me want to buy.

If I was looking for something to help me create products, I would be looking for a software or a fast-action guide, not coaching. Coaching would be helpful if I wanted to maximize the sales of my product by offering ways to do that.

All in all, it is not bad and at least headed in the right direction.

As a professional copywriter, I'm not going to address your copy directly, but will address what you've said with two points:

1. Vocabulary size does not matter. Most successful copy aimed a general audience is written at a 7th grade level.

2. Grammar is essential. If you don't have a mastery of grammar, get one before you write any copy. Writing copy without knowing grammar is like going to war without a weapon.

No one is born with a great vocabulary. Vocabulary is cultivated. Your new best friend is a thesaurus. Your next new best friend is your mind, pay attention to the sales letters that you click open, then which ones you actually click "buy". Read that language carefully. That's all there is to it, no big secret.

Zero in on WHAT you'll be helping them do.

Right now, like the sales booster said, you're
so bland and weak, people will yawn and click away.

But, if you had something that said...

"How to Create a Profitable Ebook in 24 Hours or Less"

"Learn How to Create a Video in One Hour or Less, and
then Turn Around and Sell it for $47, Over and Over Again"

Those are just quick examples right off the top of my head,
but nail down and be ultra-specific as to what you're
going to show them.

Be specific to the point where they can
picture in their mind, all the steps they're
gonna take. Before people take any action,
they'll first imagine themselves doing it.

So, instead of being generic, tell them
exactly what you'll show them how to do.

What you'll help them make, how long it
will take, how much money they can make, etc...

If I was selling a dog-training course, I wouldn't
just say "buy my course and I'll show you how
to train your dog... I'd say...

"Give me $39.00 and I'll give you 2 DVDs, two CDs,
and one manual. It will take you 2 hours to go through
the audio and video material.

It will take you one hour to go through the printed
material. You will do 15 minutes of exercises every day
with your dog. At the end of 15 days, your dog will stop
biting, will come to you when called, will not run away
when taken off the leash, and will sit when you say "sit"

See how much more specific that is than saying "help you
train your dog"... yet that's what many marketers will say.

To me, once you get the headline nailed, the rest will follow:

Here's my quick rewrite:

Learn how to make your own
HOT information product that
makes you cold, hard, cash
24 hours every day


But the market will tell you. Get two copy treatments that you like, then split test using solo ads to see what pulls better.

It's very ... Eben Pagan.

As far as I'm concerned, it's bland and unappealing but you are not making any major mistakes either.

However, you need to mention how you are unique and how you are going to deliver this benefit, since it's a level five market.

You need to pin-point exactly what are the desired benefits for your prospect since easier, sure-fire may not be exactly what they are looking.

And you need to understand your prospects a little better. Most folks don't waste time because they can't even begin working on their information product. They don't know how to begin and they are afraid of failing.

In any case, it's making sense to some point.

Razvan