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Copyrighting ugh -- feedback on this page please

by donnamos
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I would love feedback on this page. Profitable Workshops E-Course * Infinite Possiblities Coaching

I have set up a paydotcom affiliate for this page. I want it to be successful for affiliates and I would love your feedback.

I can't be alone in suffering through writing compelling copy.

Create a Great Day
Donna
#copyrighting #feedback #page #ugh
  • Profile picture of the author Loren Woirhaye
    It needs a lot of work. Sometimes it's challenging to write copy
    for your own product.
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    • Profile picture of the author Angela Kambarian
      Donna,
      thank you for posting your page.
      My predecessor is right.
      It needs some work.

      Put more spark into your headline.
      It's not terrible but should be "spiced up" a bit
      to increase response.

      "Really you should enroll now this is an introductory price..."
      sounds a bit awkward.
      Replace it with a more compelling "Enroll now and benefit
      from a huge discount and a coaching session", something
      along those lines. Of course, this phrase needs to be thought through.

      Instead of Sign up now, you could say: "Four ways you can benefit
      from the workshop" or "Four Reasons to Sign up for the Workshop"
      Hype is not necessary but the copy should be more compelling
      and convincing.
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  • Profile picture of the author Christie Love
    Hi Donna,

    I just reviewed your site. I want to start by saying, the art of copywriting takes a lengthy learning curve in order to gain adept skills to make copy that's does it's best to convert your customers into sales. There's probably too much to information to give you in this thread. I'm thinking that's why not too many people have responded. :-(

    To tell you the truth, the entire sales letter needs to be re-done starting from scratch as you're missing the whole concept of writing copy. If you want to write the sales page yourself, I would suggest getting some copywriting books to study and analyzing different sales letters each day.

    If you absolutely need some advice right now, then I would suggest you follow the format of...

    Promise
    Problem
    Tell A Story
    Product Description
    Benefits (bullets)
    Call to Action

    I hope this helps. Good luck!
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