REVIEW MY WSO SALES COPY

Great samples. Why not make your sales page stand out like the samples?
Too much red at the top. Choose a different color for your sub headline.
Throw a few testimonials from previous clients if possible.
Cheers,
calvin

Hi, sounds like a fine product, but contrary to popular belief, products do not 'sell themselves'. You need a new sales letter.

It is not long enough to tell the sales message requires to sell a $157 product. You have links to your blogs but no other proof that they make any money at all. There's no problem-aggravate-solve-prove-call to action. No testimonials. No guarantee.

I'm guessing you have seen a few sales letters online, and had a go at writing one here. And that's ok, just don't pin your hopes on that letter pulling any sales at all. You can get a better letter written on rentacoder or elance for a few hundred bucks, maybe less. Any copywriter on this forum could put together a letter for you which would make sales.

Hey, if you don't have a go you are guaranteed of a zero result, so good on you!

Overall, I like your product and think there are a lot of bloggers and site flippers who would be interested in buying, but the entire sales letter needs some serious work.

If you insist on writing the letter yourself, here a few suggestions to add that'll make the sales letter more attractive...

1. Keep your focus on what the buyer will get, not what you have.
2. The header definitely needs rewording.
3. One major thing that's missing is a description of all the ways the blogs can generate income, backed by proof. Note: The amount of money to be made from the blogs should be more than the cost of your service.
4. Yes, testimonials should definitely be included.
5.Add a "call to action".
6. Add bullets instead of numbers.
7. Looking at your letter more closely, there really isn't any copy.



If you need help, let me know.

I know your intent was to get copy feedback. I really like the layout. Where can I get more info about purchasing your WP templates? Thanks

The biggest thing I think you are missing is what the buyer REALLY gets out of it. A passive income... the desire is that they can log-in to their blog, write a post or two on the topic and watch the money come in.

For instance you ask: Do You Want To Own A Wordpress Niche Blog

The truth is, only a geek has a burning desire to own a Wordpress Blog.... what people WANT is MONEY, MONEY, MONEY for very little work. That's what you need to sell.

You have samples and I only clicked on one... also, I wouldn't label the links "Sample" ... call them "Hot Dating Site" or something that sounds inviting... and while you show the samples you don't say what those sites meant to their owner.... are they currently earning $100 a month... so that someone could hope to get back their $157 investment in 2 months?

You say: What Can The Buyer Expect From This Package?

and then you talk in technical terms... like I don't really know what I would DO with 100 Twitter followers. What I was hoping I could expect was MONEY, MONEY, MONEY.... will I get money if I do nothing more with the blog? How about if I write a post a month?

I once heard someone say that you take your list of features/benefits and ask "So what?" for each of them. You get 100 Twitter followers... well, so what? what does that translate into that I care about?

Hope this helps!

All your samples relate to dating. Could we have some variety there?
In the main page the sample could have a name and possibly be followed by a brief descriptor.
Sample blogs would be references, but you will have to state that explicitly.

The top few lines need to be redone.

In the middle you have written about what a person would get with a blog, make it lead up to the bit about Adsense etc. just before the end. E.g. talk about the keyword and how it would yield a better search engine ranking and hence better Adsense returns.
The parts are disconnected.

Use $117 something unusual like that can be disturbing not attractive.
Best