Critique Request: Screenwriting Analysis Sales Letter
I have created a website where I will be offering script analysis services for screenwriters looking to get feedback on their script. That service is the main product I am selling.
The sales page can be viewed here:
Script Coaching « Screenwriting Smarts
Being that it was my first sales letter, I could definitely use some feedback. I went through the entire Makepeace's Desktop Copy Coach program and just about every thing I could get my hands on from John Carlton, so I feel like it's pretty good, but I just don't have the experience to judge it objectively.
What I Could Really Use Help On:
#1) Is it too long? I just went balls out and tried to cover the entire offer. I went over the exact areas of the script I would be analyzing, since I was trying to sell the "5 Critical Areas" part. I figured it would give me an opportunity to create some doubt / fear in the prospect as well. "Oh no! What if my premise is one of these limiting ones he's talking about?"
#2) Is the offer clear? I really had a hard time creating a pricing table I was satisfied with, but I feel like this one clearly tell the prospect what features come in each package. If after reading the letter, you're still confused, lemme know.
#3) Is the "close" good? I couldn't make up my mind on which close to use, so I kinda use two. First I go with the "Screenwriting Crossroads" close where I tell them the three options they have, and then after that I go into the logical "Reasons Why" other people have purchased in the past, and then tell them if any of that makes sense, they should buy too.
#4) Did I cover all the objections? The only one I can think of that I didn't cover was that I've never sold a script before or had a screenplay produced. BUT - that is EXTREMELY common among screenwriting consultants, and a well known fact that the "big wig" authors (Robert McKee, Linda Seger) have no writing credits or their movies were terrible, yet people flock to see them on the regular. So I'm not tripping on it too bad, and I feel the eBook and articles will help sell my expertise. PLUS - satisfaction guaranteed!
#5) Is there anything I missed or forgot to include? I feel like I've covered all the bases and put together a solid sales letter, and didn't leave anything out, but maybe I did! Lemme know!
Feel free to comment on the rest of the site too if you like, I'd love to get some feedback from other marketers!
Thanks guys, I really appreciate the help!
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