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Squeeze Page Critique

by JohnOnFire
7 replies
Had some pretty decent success in CPA over the last few months so I've decided to embark on my very own product in the weight loss niche.

Wondering if you guys would mind having a look at my squeeze page and let me know what you think.

DON'T enter your info as you won't receive the said report as it's still being written.

here it is secretfatlossformula.com

thanks
#critique #page #squeeze
  • Profile picture of the author RogozRazvan
    OK ... so let's see what you've got here (btw, nice blonde girl :-)

    The headline is a cliche but this doesn't mean that it's not working. However, it was used again and again. What your lawyer doesn't want you to know. What your fitness trainer doesn't want you to know. What your IM guru doesn't ... you get the point.

    Unless it's a virgin market which I kind of doubt since the people who buy weight loss are at least 70% the same market which bough weight-loss products before, they've seen this before.

    Plus, it would be nice to give some insight into it. Why is it a secret? Why are they hiding it from you? Why are you giving this for free? It's reason why copy for a reason

    Thank you,
    Razvan
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    • Profile picture of the author DanteRomero
      The headlines are clashing with each other. Try reading it out loud. It should jump out at you. The way it doesn't flow smoothly.
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      • Profile picture of the author JohnOnFire
        Thanks so much for your input.

        do you think it would flow better if I took out the following:
        "Why Are They Hiding It From You?

        If The Public Finds Out About This Secret Their Profits Would Crash"

        thanks again

        Originally Posted by DanteRomero View Post

        The headlines are clashing with each other. Try reading it out loud. It should jump out at you. The way it doesn't flow smoothly.
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        • Profile picture of the author Handdy
          Multiple colors are very distracting and make it hard to read the correct point
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          • Profile picture of the author JohnOnFire
            Well thats helpful!

            There is norhing to purchase anyway, its a free report


            Originally Posted by Handdy View Post

            Multiple colors are very distracting and make it hard to read the correct point
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  • Profile picture of the author NTeddy
    You might want to check out some of your competitors' squeeze page. A simple google search will do

    Base on my experience mentioning the some of the main benefits your report have to offer will help to increase the conversion rate.

    You may also need to put a stronger Call To Action. Even a simple '!' mark may cost you a few % of your conversion.

    If it's a free report, then say it's free.

    Love the blonde girl tho.

    Hope it helps.
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    • Profile picture of the author JohnOnFire
      Great points, i was thinking that it did say it was free but i have changed it around so many times it must not

      Originally Posted by NTeddy View Post

      You might want to check out some of your competitors' squeeze page. A simple google search will do

      Base on my experience mentioning the some of the main benefits your report have to offer will help to increase the conversion rate.

      You may also need to put a stronger Call To Action. Even a simple '!' mark may cost you a few % of your conversion.

      If it's a free report, then say it's free.

      Love the blonde girl tho.

      Hope it helps.
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