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Please review my copy...

by scorpions84
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Guys, I've been practicing to learn copywriting because last night I was thinking how can I make a huge amount of sale from anything I want to sell.

Now, I'm practicing to improve my copywriting because I now realized that one of the most important factor in IM, is to have a great copywriting skills that's why I'm trying to learn, maybe not to master yet, this very important IM skill.

So please spot some holes within my copywriting skills.


Here's the copy:
Copywriting Practice...

Thanks in advance.
#copy #review
  • Profile picture of the author Daniel Scott
    First of all, it's obviously English isn't your main language. It's hard enough to be a good copywriter in your OWN language, let alone someone else's. I would never dream of writing copy in French, for example, even though I (kind of) speak the language.

    Secondly, you have absolutely none of the critical components for copywriting. My advice is to look at the "read these copywriting books" thread, buy a few, read them, and learn from them.

    At the moment your copy is, to be frank, so subpar that it's impossible to know where to start. If you make a start on studying copywriting, you will have a solid foundation from which to build on.

    -Dan
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  • Profile picture of the author scorpions84
    Yep, I think English is my 5th language?

    I'll try to read some of the "recommended books" for copywriting.

    Thanks for your comment, btw.
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  • Profile picture of the author scorpions84
    I tried to correct some spellings and punctuations.

    Hope that would make a difference...

    Please give more criticisms.

    Thanks.
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    • Profile picture of the author MontelloMarketing
      Scorpian,

      Spelling and punctuation aren't the real problem. The 500 pound gorilla in the room is your english. I recommend either writing in another language... or giving up on copywriting as a career choice.

      But I strongly urge the first option. Write copy for people who speak your language. I bet you'll be pretty good at it.
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  • Profile picture of the author scorpions84
    Mabuhay Montello

    The gorilla seems to be very heavy...

    Anyways, I plan to use copywriting for my affiliate campaigns.

    Now, I know the most critical mistake in my copy.hahaha...

    Thanks.
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