A Sales Page in Progress - Suggestions, Help, and Ideas?

It isn't a bad start.

You've got to start agitating the "symptoms" that affiliates go through.

What's the bad advice they get and what are the predictable outcomes you can position yourself to help them avoid or overcome?

Then...

Why are YOU the person they should listen to - after all the advice they've received, up until now, made them fail?

Provide the offer (which sounds awesome.)

And communicate what they'll be able to achieve in their life - by becoming a smart affiliate.

Build the consequences for what they'd be leaving on the table - if they continue going in the direction they are RIGHT NOW...

...give them one more reminder of what's on the table.

Close it out.

Some powerful P.S. stuff.

Boom!

Mark

Some inspiration:

Email Players Newsletter

The Attention-Thieves; Communiqué by D Bnonn Tennant

Perry Marshall Marketing Letter & Renaissance Club Newsletter

Mastermind Club

http://secrets.dobermandan.com/three-free-gifts/

Rather than "writing from your heels" use a proven template. Templates break sales letters down into component parts.

They give you the ability to write each part of your sales letter separately. And you can skip around and write the component that's most clear in your mind at any given time.

Great way to get clarity.

When you're done, put all the parts together and add any necessary transitions.

Alex

I am an affiliate marketer, and after reading your sales letter, I found that it wasn't talking to me. As to the problems an affiliate goes through with preparing and launching a campaign.


Give a list of benefits that will attract me to your offer.

What will your newsletter do for me?

Find some good sales letters and use them as a model if you have some copywriting skills

Otherwise, hire a good copywriter.

I charge $100 for copywriting critiques, but I'll give you four pointers for free:

1. Your logo is too big. Or perhaps you intended for it to be a headline? If so, it tells me nothing. At present, I need to scroll down on your page to even figure out what it's about -- a big mistake. Don't make your prospects have to do unnecessary thinking or work!

2. Your "real" headline: "This is the page the gurus didn't want you to see..." also tells me nothing. What's the benefit of the thing you're about to sell me? Who are the gurus? Perhaps your goal is to direct people from somewhere else to your site, in which case you've already introduced "the gurus" and proved how they are the enemy of your consumers. But I doubt that's your plan. And if I'm right, you've got to change your headline, the most important part of your copy.

3. Your sub-headline makes a mistake common to novice copywriters: Asking a question that could easily be answered with "no" or "never." Never ask a question that a prospect could dismiss, unless you are trying to qualify prospects at that point. Your question here is not only hard to read due to the punctuation but is also a question that is unlikely to be going on in the conversation already in your prospect's head. You're assuming he's bought several products before and that they've all failed. You're priming your prospect to think that online products are scams or useless -- right before you try to sell him an online product! Replace this with a benefit of your program (at this point I still have no idea what this page is doing).

4. Change your picture. Having a personal picture is a good idea. Consumers like to buy from people not from businesses, after all. But, you must keep this in mind when selling a product: Always use a picture in which you are smiling and looking directly at the camera. This adds a level of personal connection to your copy. Your present picture gives me the feeling that you're a stone-cold, serious, introverted guy. I personally wouldn't want to be friends with you based on this picture.

Those four points were from my first impressions of your page -- it took me under 10 seconds to pick out these flaws. It will take your prospect less time to close the window.