Last Chance - Free Sales Page Video Critique

by TimCastleman

Posted: 15 years ago 17 replies

COPY WRITING

Ok finally got all my computer and software issues ironed out. If you have a SALES PAGE that you would like a free video critique on please post it here. I am going to limit these to 3 again.

Remember I need your permission to use the critique with others if needed.

Also I am looking for a traditional sales page, not an article or squeeze page.

Post the URLs here. Thanks.

Tim

#critique #free #page #sales #video

Intrepreneur 15 years ago

Well I was just about to post a topic asking about 2 healines, which one was better.

So I'm game for a video critique..

I will upload the new headline now and show you the other headline I was using..

Here is the URL http://www.thepclongevityguide.com

Here is my Old headline

"Finally A Guide You Can Trust To Ensure Complete Protection, Longevity And Worry Free Computing"

I've uploaded the new headline, I'm looking forward to critique.

Thanks.
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TimCastleman 15 years ago

One down. If you want one let me know. I am going to be busy playing Xbox 360's new UFC game all day tomorrow (get off me I spent the last week driving 2800 miles and making four figures last week - I earned it).

So today and Wednesday will be the only days I am able to do this.

Tim
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- TimCastleman 15 years ago
  
  Glad you liked it. More importantly, I hope you found it helpful and can make the changes mentioned.
  
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  Intrepreneur 15 years ago
  
  Yea cool, I was also very impressed with the critique in a way that I saw potential in it for you.
  
  I don't think there is a need to go into details on this one, I think maybe you didn't even know, or maybe you did..
  
  OR maybe it's just my very active mind and ability to listen carefully, either way it was a great critique and if you wanted to know more about what I've just said, I think you may not but just in case you can PM me.
  
  Finally thanks for the ideas, I can now make a few tweaks getting ready for my launch.
  
  Thank you.
  
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  TimCastleman 15 years ago
  
  Two down, one more open for anyone who has a sales letter they want some help with.
  
  Tim
  
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spearce000 15 years ago

I'd be interested. Please have a look at my Photoshop Site Photoshop Master - Adobe Photoshop Video Tutorials Right now it has a really high bounce rate 90%+
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magic456 15 years ago

Hey man,

I would be interested too. My URl: http://www.get-a-girlfriend.org/

Magic
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- TimCastleman 15 years ago
  
  Magic -
  
  Shoot me a PM with your email address.
  
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  TimCastleman 15 years ago
  
  Guys this is fun, got room for 2 more. That's it.
  
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  magic456 15 years ago
  
  You must be totally out of your mind to do this kind of review for free! I mean it! It was very well done! You took your time and went in depth. You really wanted to help with your review and yes you did.
  
  Thanks a ton man!
  
  Guys if you need review of your sales page jump on it, you'll be glad you did.
  
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J. David Rogers 15 years ago

I'd love to take you up on your offer!

Here's my landing page: http://www.rapidspanish.net/sample-landing-page/
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- TimCastleman 15 years ago
  
  Welcome to 404 error page!
  
  Welcome to this customized error page. You've reached this page because you've clicked on a link that does not exist. This is probably our fault... but instead of showing you the basic '404 Error' page that is confusing and doesn't really explain anything, we've created this page to explain what went wrong.
  You can either (a) click on the 'back' button in your browser and try to navigate through our site in a different direction, or (b) click on the following link to go to homepage.
  
  That is what I got when I went to the page.
  
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karlp295 15 years ago

I dont know if you are still available to do this but I hope and pray you are. Boy do I need this!

Here's my sales page recently reworked but poor conversion and ı dont know why.
Can you enlighten me?

Self Esteem Secrets E-Book - written by Karl Perera

thanks - look forward to your critique...
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tomcam 15 years ago

Tim, I'd love to see you have at my page at On the Web in an Hour. Thanks tons.

Cheers,

Tom Campbell
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J. David Rogers 15 years ago

Gah, sorry about the 404 error. It works now!

Sample Landing Page | Rapid Spanish
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BizBooks 15 years ago

i'll take a critique of Apartment Building Fortunes - home thanks!
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- TimCastleman 15 years ago
  
  Ok guys all full. Thanks to everyone. I will get these done this week/weekend. Please email me your email address so I can get them to you. Thanks to everyone.
  
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