Squeeze Page Critique Needed
First off, excuse any potential typos - I'm typing this from a friend's computer, in a house next to a gorgeous lake, and with a hangover to boot after what, by all rights, is the kind of weekend that belongs strictly in my adolescent years, so bear with me...
Anyway, shortly before leaving, I had put up a squeeze page and set up some targeted PPC traffic to it. It's converting - but not at the kind of rate I would like to.
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I've had 69 visitors so far, of whom 10 have opted in, giving me a dismal conversion rate of 6.9%, which is pretty grim, even by my current beer-goggled standards.
If you can offer some critique on how it can be improved, I'd be very grateful - one of my squeeze pages in the relationship repair niche converts at ~30% with targeted EZA traffic, but, for the life of me, I cannot replicate it with this one.
I am using the Eben Pagan technique of keeping it short and sweet - but it seems that it's too short and not sweet enough.
Ideas?
Thanks in advance,
George
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